aw so heartwrenching wonder how it will all turn out

Lovely,simply lovely.

FAN!~

Wow...that's brutal. I know this is a one shot, but it would be awesome if it was continued down the line. Eh, that's just me. Nice story.

This. Was. Amazing. I loved how the tail unfolded. How you showed the the various blind obsessions and their dissolution. Great work! Also, protective Vlad is adorable.

nice story

It's really good.

A tear-jerker. Your writing was spectacular.

THAT WAAS GREEAT

I love this story so much, ur portrayal of glad and Danny are great!

Words don't describe how much I loved this

Very sweet and very sad, not to mention quite believable. From what I've seen of the elder fentons, they would have acted exactly as they did here if they captured Phantom...
Thanks for writing!

Eeeee! I loved this! Your Vlad is sooo spot on! And poor sweet cinnamon roll Danny. I couldn't put it down.

Hi! I really like your story, it has a good plot and the characters were on point, but its really hard to read.

Please don't take this the wrong way, but the formatting is wrong. All the content is bunched up in a stream of words. Please, use individual paragraphs instead of bunching up 3 or 4 paragraphs into one. Here, I'll give you a few tips:

1) if what you are writing changes topic, make a new paragraph. Example:

/The morning was especially chilly that day, but beautiful nonetheless. The sun had risen and painted the sky in gold streaks and blue strokes. The clashing colors danced around the dew drops that coated the city. The light breeze shook the trees' mane, drops cascading from them in a glittering spectacle.

Danny, however, had absolutely no mind to pay attention to this. He groaned as the shrilling beeping of his alarm pierced the air. He stayed under the covers, hoping for a miracle that would turn the alarm off. After a while, it became evident that none would happen. Having delayed the inevitable, Danny shoved a hand outside his cover, and slammed it over the alarm./

See how I made a new paragraph for Danny?
Paragraphs let the reader know a new event or topic is going to be presented. This lets the reader piece the story together easily. If the reader were to read a story without paragraphs, they wouldn't know when something began and another ended, and the story would just be a long word soup. Furthermore, its really desesperating to read a word wall, since the reader will never know when it ends.

2) always start a new paragraph whenever someone speaks. Example:

/"Morning," Said Danny as he walked down the stairs.

"Good Morning, Danny," Said his mom pleasantly from the couch. She was snug in a blanket, and holding a steaming cup of coffee between her hands./

Just as the tip says, dialogue alway starts a new paragraph. Dialogue is never inside a paragraph, only at the beginning. You can also write dialogue like this:

/"Eh, I don't know Jazz," Said Danny, rubbing his neck, "Seems risky, even for me."/

See how there's dialogue at the beginning and end of the sentence? If you do that kind of dialogue, you have to make a paragraph under it.

You can look up more ways to write paragraphs! Theres a ton of websites with helpful content like this!

And you're already good at writing, yes! The only thing now is to polish those writing skills! Make them as shiny as you can!