It doesn't matter how much older she thinks she is than Kakashi, she's acting like nothing more than an immature childshe is going to be treated that way.

Hooray for actually-bonding with Oro! I love Orochimaru, and when people actually spend the time to tie somebody to him, to stop him from going nuts after seeing what death did to Tsunade and trying to become immortal by any means.

Orochimaru gets a bad rap for all the stuff he did, but I still like him. Screw that wide-ass tongue though, shit's creepy.

Hi there!
Your story is brilliant!
I see you have updated in a while, but I still hope you can at some time find the inspiration to finish it. Even, if you don't, that is fine, real life is far more important. Anyway, thank you for this lovely story.

continua

Dear Drake:

Tiny thing, but - would you really call that summary K-rated?

Sincerely,
Qoheleth

hey! vegetables are good XD

Esta historia es increible. Me encantaría si continuaras, sin embargo de todas maneras fue muy divertido por compartirla

Example "To the girl's charging in her new, golden kimono Shiori met all mentioned criteria"
I'm pretty sure you meant chagrin.

The fanfic is pretty good but I'd suggest editing it a bit. There are moments where you make silly mistakes that probably could've been fixed if you looked through it a bit. If I were to guess the reason why they keep appearing, I'd say it would be because you're not making mistakes with spelling, you're just typing the wrong words entirely so they don't end up underlined in red and you don't notice them.

Great, upload another chapter soon!

Oh my god
She became friends with freaking orochimaru and shared a ‘moment’ with him
This is too funny
So funny
Ahahahahahahaha

God this is so cute I want them to be happy forever hope they don't die

This is great! I love the story so far! Nice touch with Tora. A spy in the midst of the Daimyo's court, it sounds like something a Homage would do. I'm glad Obito is back in Konoha and I'm wondering if you'll have him develop sensing abilities? Maybe something similar to Toph's abilities from Avatar: the Last Airbender. I wonder what Obito and Kakashi think of Shiori mentioning her past life when she was drunk?

There were a couple of mistakes, mainly mixing up some words with similar sounding ones, but with different meanings. I would suggest getting a beta reader, as they'll not only read over your chapters and correct any mistakes, but also you can bounce ideas off of them. I hope you can find time to update this soon. Thank you for writing and sharing this with us! Good luck in your writing!

This story is absolutely hilarious, I love it! :)

hey are you alive 8 months without new chapther