Kikiyo's a goddamned snake!

its official she really IS stupid...

...ok she does realize that even though /they/ know it is a business transaction, to everyone else it is supposed to be real...right? her flirting with naraku- in public as well- dishonors sesshomaru and makes their pending marriage look like the farce that it really is at this point? she just risked the whole plan on what? a momentary attraction to someone she doesnt even know? how stupid.

interesting concept, the only negative i see right now is you either need to proof read or get a beta. Its kinda hard to follow the story in some spots but other then that thumbs up.

Hi! It's a good story so far, from what I've read. I do notice some inconsistencies in your writing, grammar and tense. Reviewing after writing a chapter will help you reduce these and will make your story more clean cut. I'd be willing to beta for you if you would like. Keep writing! You've got great potential and I can't wait to dive into your other stories~

This felt like a Korean drama! So intense and well written. Loved every part of it! Thanks for the story. :)

I am going to stop reading this story because of the many writing mistakes. I believe if you would take your time to read a chapter before posting many of the mistakes would not be there. I am also not a fan of modern time stories so a warning about that in the summary would be appreciated. Some of the mistakes I saw were: beside of sesshoumaru (I'm not sure if this is a true mistake but it reads uncomfortably), when they get out of the care you typed captured twice, as if you changed how ypu wanted to write sentence in the middle of writing it but forgot to go back amd erase what was allready written. And then when describing Kagomes dress you should write colors !from! White to ?pink purple sunset? To black. (What's up with this. Write from white to pink to purple to black. Or write a sunset in the colors white, pink, purple and black.
The story itself has potential and had it been writtem better I would have continued reading, despite it being a modern-AU story. I hope you can use this criticism to better your writing!

I can't hold it in any longer...Kagome is an idiot. There! I said it out lowd. I feel so much better.

loved the fic.

Hi. I think your story so far is good, but you should really find a beta. Sometimes sentences are so garbled that you have to read them twice or triece to understand them.

That hinestly was a great story! Good job! :) i thoroughly enjoyed it!

What an interesting story, I had fun reading it!

What hapnd between 25 n 26, it feels like I missed a chapter. Did something happen the party? N y was sesshoumaru there?

Great Story. I Really Enjoyed It Although You Left A Lot Of Things Unsettled But I Guess The Surprise Of It All Is Worth It!

I'm having a really hard time reading this. It seems well thought out but the grammar and spelling makes me stumble over the scentenses. Perhaps a beta reader to help with proof reading would be something you may find helpful! Good luck!