I thought you did great with the character introductions! When you did the part about the long haired blonde girl, I knew immediately that it was Lili. I cracked up when Hworang said that her break room was nicer than his first apartment, and the best part to me was Lili helping Asuka pick out some good-lookin' clothes! Great job, it wasn't okay it was awesome!

Awesome job

Oh my gosh. I'm loving this story so far! Update soon

Nice story! But I can't deny it feels a bit "hurried" in this chapter...
About the rating, if you're going to describe harm/death or sex scenes with way many details, then it should be M. Otherwise, just T is okay.
Looking forward to read more. :)