This story had me in tears multiple times! Totally heartwrenching but such an incredible read!
Thank you so much for sharing this

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This story made me cry. It was well written, great job.

I wanted to comment on your story although I know the story has ended months ago. I thought your story had great themes running through out every chapter and as a whole. Qualities of sacrife, love, commitment, and reliance on God presented themselves greatly.
I understood that you wanted to create a different story and bring the Prince/Belle love story in a different light. However, some of the timing on each chapter were so off. What i mean is that with years and having so many babies were a bit off. I do understand that in those times divorce was not common nor only having 1 or 2 kids. However, we never got a glimpse of what Belle and Gaston experience on a daily basis. It felt like in each chapter a baby was born and that was it. I think working on chronological time line, sequencing, and putting more into each character would give the story more balance instead of having to many jumps. I also had a had time understanding Belle’s character. She was such a strong woman and when she went into this marriage, she never creatively thought of ways to stand up in her marriage. I also wanted to see more of what happened with the prince during those years when he lost her but I understand you wanted to focus on Belle’s life and her children. I thought it was sweet to bring her daughter back connected to the prince. Overall, it was great to read just expected to see maybe a bit more cliffhangers or connecting it to the Prince’s life. Thanks for writing!

I really loved your story!

For my review last chapter, I meant "[D]on't talk about her (Belle's) father (Maurice) that way!"
Forgot to capitalize. :)
Thank you for this wonderful story.

I like how Gaston here is a hypocrite, punching the butcher who said Belle was odd, but now saying the same thing to his own daughter. Just like in the movie where he told LeFou, "don't talk about her (Belle's) father (Maurice) that way!", but laughing anyway.

This is making me cry. Gaston's cruelty, Jacqueline's misfortune, and the hatred they have toward each other, it's all a heartbreaking tragedy. *wipes tear*

Anyway, the proper dialogue format would be "(sentence) (comma)" he said. E.g. "Death seems to suit you," he said, or, "These clothes were given to me to wear by my friend Porcelain," she replied.
If the dialogue succeeds the pronoun, then it's like: With a soft voice that no longer held any malice for she was too tired to argue anymore, she said, "Don't do this father."

You have talent at writing a tragedy and I'm glad there's a proper closure. This is wonderful! I love it!

Gaston Sr. is despicable and loathesome! He has such a capacity to be wicked.
Anyway, great job on Jacqueline's remark, saying that it wasn't her job to baby sit Gaston (Jr). That sounded so funny considering that she was talking to Gaston Sr. I could imagine why Gaston Sr. was so infuriated.

Well, I'm glad he realized he never should have married her, but then it's too late. They never could make each other happy if their personalities always clashed.

I'm devastated for the children. That's why this story evokes so much emotion, because so many children are involved in such a dysfunctional household.

Again, there are minor errors that could be remedied by a bit of proofreading such as "I am hunger (hungry)," and "her (he) knew who was really in control." Also, dialogue tags such as "(name) said" helps in making the reader know who's speaking when there are several characters present, I didn't know who was speaking when they were fighting over the food, but if you intended that to have an effect that the situation's chaotic and that the voices really can't be discerned, then that's fine, too.

I felt so tense while reading the gossip as if I were in the story! That was heartbreaking. This story is so tragic and believable. It's not hard to imagine Gaston as an abusive husband and you've done a great job telling a story about how their life would've been if they were married without learning to truly love each other.

It just needs a little proofreading here and there, such as missing punctuations and the part where it said "his arm was dark as night," I think you meant his hair? But aside from minimal errors in form, the story's great! So much pathos in this story.

I absolutely adored this story, it brought tears to my eyes. This story is so well written, you are a gifted writer :-)

I was tearing up towards the ending. Eve. Though belle didn't get her happy ending, I'm glad her daughter and Adam did in the end, or at least somewhat happy. Thanks for writing!

Why Jacqueline has such bad tendencies? And where is the beast? And why did you keep skipping time?

He should have waited to get her alone god he is an idiot!

Great story!