I really enjoyed this story! You captured the characters so well, and gave exposed Gray’s caring side (which everyone knows he has). Awesome! Aishlyn was great, too; she developed a great deal throughout. I love when a female character has ambition and wants to better herself.

Um. Who on earth is Gary?

This was so well done. I absolutely loved it. None of the characters seemed OOC, and you did such a great job of fully developing Aishlyn's story and character. I loved it, and you did a wonderful job paying attention to detail. Well written. Chapter lengths were perfect and everything resolved in the end. Well done.

:o whoops. Sorry! There was some computer problems.
:)really love ur story! I hope u make more great stories!
(Love gray x oc fics for some reason lol)
Please make another story of fairy tail soon! XD

DX waahhh! Update please kerennie! *pout*
*begins to hug macey and asl trio*
I need an update to begin my day! XD please update soon! '3'
Btw...ya know...black sorta reminds me of star-crossed lovers lol XD the only thing is that they r free to love each other. (Too bad jack is in denial with his feelings earlier*snicker* but he admitted it!) Love is in the air! Im surprised ace is getting a cousin but i hope they get along. And i hope ace gets a lover*snicker* wonder if roger or rouge would get overprotective? For the girl or their own so I dunno. Unless ace is gay in this story like black XD pfft!

Umm ,., its confusing. .. at first its Gray's POV then next its Erza's ... if you're gonna change POV please warn us ... if i didn't read it carefully I'm probably lost in the story even though its only chapter 1

Cute story and very interesting new magic idea! I really love gray so nice you made a good story with him

Hey there! I love this story so much. One thing I noticed. You might wanna indicate better when the story changes pov during a chapter. I had a little difficulty following sometimes. But other than that. I love this story!

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Good storyline. well done. looking forward to next chapter.

No it was not to long in fact you could make them longer.

I am enjoying this series so far. It looks like you know what you are doing with the writing on proper grammar and punctuation