You write some damn good shit. And fuck that Zentauri guy, you made it pretty clear Pyhrra is chillaf

Still not see why we should sympathize with a slaver bitch.

Also, good job on completely destroying Jaune's competency, love it when an author can't be assed about and just throws their characters an idiot ball under the pretense of 'character growth'.

Your writing and story, besides some really stupid decisions, is good though. Like the setting you are trying to weave here and also like the fleshing out of the characters.

So Pyrrha is a slaver? So much better! Like you didn't butcher her character at all, really.

I hope everything calms down for you and you can comfortably continue writing this amazing Fic.

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This. Is an insanely good read, I like the fact that you've made Pyrrha a free spirit and I sincerely hope she continues this path. Second, Jaune is an amazing captain for this story. He's everything a real soldier would aspire to be. I sincerely hope they can come to a better accord than what they are at currently, because something doesn't smell right... I almost feel like these three groups have been set up and the ones that will take the fall once everything is done going pear shaped on that island.

Great work on the new chapter, I'm so glad to see this story continue

I honestly don't think you needed the AN here. While I feel like Jaune was a bit too nonchalant dealing with enemies he deems less skilled, you drew his emotions perfectly here.

Similarly, we don't need to know what's going on with Neo here because she's an out of context villain for Jaune. You have time to build her as a character on her own.

I think your writing really shone with Pyrrha's chapter with a suitably epic rally (which once again reminds me how alike our writers' sensibilities are) and then reality striking her back down to normal.

Also a lot of tantalizing bits about her history, which I really enjoyed.

Finally an update wahoo!. As for the chapter I actually enjoyed it. I got the gist of the content you covered in the AN just by reading the chapter. I especially liked Juane and his emotions, it's nice to see this AU take on him that still does his show version justice. He wants to protect life, Neo well kills since she was bored. His reaction fits his character, and his vulnerability brought on by his rage worked equally. Rage can be a powerful ally, but can betray you as well. I like your use of Pyrrha as well, it fits with her background given, and it's nice to see her choosing a course for her destiny. Only real minor issue I had was Adel being a squadron leader with rank of mere LT jg. Wether that's lowest officer rank in navy or it's second lowest (above ensign) it's still too low for a squadron CO, she should be at least full Lt with maybe XO as LT jg and others as ensigns. Minor complaint tho. Over all good chapter hope to see another update soon.

Really liked the chapter. The fights were well fleshed out and I like seeing the thoughts and fears of yang. As for changing the rating I think you should, especially if it is going to get dark, I don't think language is a problem but that is just me.

Another good showing. I really enjoyed Blake's fight especially. I got the sense of a cat playing with prey when the momentum of the battle shifted in her favor. While, as you suggest, she might have learned to embrace it more from Yang, I feel like that was probably always there, just suppressed.

Looks to me like Torchwick's been having Neo train Junior's goons. Still anon fodder, but cooler cannon fodder.

And the big one: Scarlet as Pyrrha's cousin. I did not see that coming, but I can see the potential of it. Given canon's infuriating lack of detail about the characters' pasts, filling out families and also finding something to do with the side characters is always a pain in AUs. Looks like you've got both covered!

Keep up the good work!

Keep up the good work. Nice chapter as usual, albeit on the shorter side, which is totally understandable, given real life and what not. So can I safely say that neo has her own task force in this AU? And is scarlet Pyrrha's actual blood cousin , or is that just how people from the orphanage speak, as they are basically family, but in which case, wont sister be a more apt fit?

In fact , I can not make a clear distinction between T or M
How dark and swearing need switching to M

Rest assured I'm content with this excellent chapter. Also good job with quote at beginning it perfectly fitted this chapter. Also I like the portrayal of both Blake and Yang. It certainly fits the world they live in. Or personally agree with you in Blake just because she's quite doesn't mean she same in the privacy of her mind. And Nora's arrival was perfect for her. Poor Ren, why do I feel the alliance won't be smooth sailing?
As for rating I recommend switching to M. Partially for pirates unique language (and sailors in general really) as well as well if your basing this fic off Jim butchers books then between combat, language and potential romance it's best to just accept M rating. Keep up the excellent work

And Torchwick shows up to mess everything up...

Sage was certainly emotional. I'm thinking the line between the literal and metaphorical will probably end up being blurry.