I loved that! It really captured the awkward and adorable relationship between Fiyero and Elphaba perfectly. It wasn't too rushed or too much, just right to be satisfied, but leave your audience wanting more. I'd like to see more off of this! Great job!

i loved it! can't wait to read more from you

wow! i wasn't expecting this to be so well written, you got them so in character, i can't wait to read more of your work, this was great!

Nice one-shot.

I found it cute and fluffy, but I understand that English isn't your first language, but may I point out some slight typos? When it says 'he would drift way his eyes to...', I assume it meant 'he would drift away his eyes, to...' and when you say Mucking, do you mean Munchkin? as for the cliche, I don't really think it's a cliche. Sorry if this review sounds really bad/stiff/weird/anything else but it's just that I found things, and I really hate giving people constructive criticism because I can never deliver it right and it always ends up sounding hurtful. I found this story really funny because of all the awkwardness, and that is exactly like me when I am talking to my crush. I think I'm seeing him today after not talking to him for 6 months. I have seen him, just not spoken to him. (that's not creepy at all)