Oh. My. God. I did not see that coming. I just started reading fanfic and this one took my breath away. I actually let out a little son at the end. I know the song you are taking about and all of it together made my heart hurt...needless to say...well done. Absolutely amazing.

My recall of the movie is hazy, but I'm filling in the blanks as I go! I like your writing- very nice and clear. Its an interesting idea, having Sarah as an old woman. Looking forward to more!

That was a sad ending, but nice... You know, I kind of like sad endings, they're so rare. All that happens in stories these days is that everything ends happily ever after... Anyways, I wish Jareth happiness, 'cause there's a Labyrinth that needs a king, and then there's Sarah's family... Yeah, thank you for the excellent read!

POWAH TO THE GOBLINS

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stupid ending but great story

*Written in reply to Toshihiko1's review*

Sarah's decision either way is a losing battle for her and her family. End of story. I wasn't trying to glorify it, just make the reader realize that Sarah thought it was the right choice at the time.

Her decision is further explained in the sequel to Time To Choose, called The Red Book. The logic isn't going to make sense until you find that part and read it.

I'll admit I was vaguely disturbed that you glorified Sarah's decision to stay with Jareth.

Initially, the offer was thus: Leave and die, keeping the lives of your loved ones intact...or stay and live, obliterating the lives of your loved ones. Morally, leaving would have been the obvious choice. Sarah was old. She'd lived a good life, leaving behind a stable family and few regrets. Her daughter and grandchild were still young, with a lot ahead of them. Kill them? Erase them? So an old woman could gain immortality? Jareth complicated things when he also offered her love. Leaving would mean destroying his heart. Staying would still mean destroying her children. ...Their loves, their lives. Was her love more important than thiers? She noted that either way, she would lose them...what kind of selfish logic is that? Her death wouldn't mean their disappearance. I can't imagine my grandmother making a similar choice.

Her final decision, even with the realization of love, seemed out of character.

...Again, though, the thing that troubled me most was that the choice she made was portrayed as the right one. You give an explanation of why the choice was noble, clarifying that her intentions are pure. It worries me a tad.

I really love this story. I think it is so well written and easy to like. I love how every thing is turing out. I will review the sequel sometime this week. Really great story!

So good and I'm glad to know that your writing a sequel.

Good ending! It's still sad Sarah died, but I guess if every fic was And They Lived Happily Ever After, it would get boring, eh? :p

~Anti

Hey, that wasn't bad. Just fine if you ask me. I liked the ending. _ Good job!

This was really good! I'm glad that you were true to your idea, and didn't just make another generic J/S.

I like this story. I LOVED the ending of CH 9.

But I wish you had left it there. Ch 10 really just detracted from the wonderful atmosphere you created. The story would have been much more effective if you'd left out the note of hope at the end.

Otherwise, very well done. I liked it, I enjoyed reading it. I'll just pretend that it ended at ch 9, and I'll be v enthusiastic :D

Wah! *sniffle sniffle* That's so sad! *cry some more* Oh well. That's the way life is, cruel. That was a brilliant story(even though I'm unhappy that Sarah *sniffle* died).

Well, I've been reading your story right along because you started out with such an excellent and interesting premise. I imagine you've taken a fair amount of flack here and there for your ending since J&S don't end up a couple.

I'm going to give you my impressions and please don't take any of this as a "flame". You're obviously quite creative (something lacking in a lot of "Laby" fiction out there) and I think you were going for something original and so I applaud you for that. It's one of the things that kept me reading until the end.

Your last few chapters were a bit "Whoa! Skrech! (as in brakes) for me because your characterizations didn't seem to line up. It didn't make any sense for me that Sarah was willing to sacrifice the lives of her own children and live with an illusion. The whole "coming of age" story in the film is about a young woman who chooses the reality of her love for her brother over the illusions of her dreams. It surprised me that you wrote a Sarah who thought only about herself in that she had already "experienced" her life with her children and could therefore pass it up and live with an illusion.

Jareth was in character until the last chapter. He seems to recover awfully quickly from her death for a guy who had loved her through so many years.

So, there you have it. My honest opinion. Please take it as well meant because I am certainly eager to read whatever you come up with next. Like I said, I do applaud your creativity and your commitment to an ending that might not have been the usual crowd-pleaser. I do think you have potential. :)

I just know that I have appreciated the honest reviews that I have received from people letting me know what they liked but also what they didn't understand or what wasn't working for them. Hope my comments are useful to you and I'll keep my eyes open for your next fic.

Solea