Well that fuckin' sucks. Hey, at least you did writing extremally well. Also, I like the character tease in the previous chapter. It felt kind of easy to guess, but meh, there were only a few people that died in a nuclear explosion on Chorus, the only ones of note are Donald Doyle and Sharkface, and I highly doubt Doyle would call the reds and blues idiots.

Hahah!
BRILLIANT!

The bluntness of this 1 sentence was so hilarious.. is that strange? Normally this would upset the reader since dead stories are common and irritating.

Altho, I’m satisfied with what you have written, it was well written, a good story and the character interactions were enjoyable to read.
Thank you for writing this.

Aawww, I didn’t get to see Locus’ torture. Although it is nice that Pershing got her thinking about what she had done.

Mmm, they talked about a failed rescue mission. Nothing about Winter having done something bad.
Go Locus saving civilians.
Shark face? How many characters are coming, did he also go through the portal of the true warrior or something? Or how is he there.

Winter has dirt on her! Things are getting spicy!
Also, real professional of her to half scream so the cameras could pick up on their location.
Locus is a professional babysitter... hah.

On the good side, he wasn’t exactly betrayed.
On the bad side, he has to work for ironwood.

I... actually did not expect that ending. Wow.
On the bright side. TAKE THAT YANG!
Whoo, that felt nice reading.

Hahah! Yes, Locus is beginning to kick ass again!
Also, nice of Weiss to pay him herself.

FUCKING HELL

Two times!
He lost two times and blacked out both times! And to make him seems even more pathetic Blake “saved” him.
Fuu...

I love fanfics and I love RWBY crossovers, but one thing they all have in common which irritates me so damn much is the fact that no one stands a chance against the RWBY characters because of their bs superpowers.

It hurts sooo much when kids beat up your favorite characters without as much as a scratch.

My feelings aside.. this was a very interesting chapter, and the fight scene was very enjoyable to read.

Seems interesting.

Aww man, I really enjoyed it, but nothing gold can stay forever.

dead like american democracy

Amazing chapter man. Keep up the good work.
Just kidding.
But this was a good story. Shame to see it dead.

Lol. Thanks for the memo. Kudos. God bless.
-Silver

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