So, I guess I should begin this by saying that this story wasn't what I thought it'd be. I'm not saying that's bad, I'm just very surprised at the route you took by the end of it. I didn't think the bullying would go that far, and I didn't think she'd commit suicide because of it, but that's part of the reason you wrote the story, I guess.

Your writing does a good job of showing people that this type of bullying does exist, that people do try to take their lives because of it, and that this antagonization is a real problem. So many people (myself included) avoid this topic because of its sensitivity and the emotions that it can cause, so I applaud you for putting this out there and portraying it as it is (you could've very easily brushed the bullying off and returned to the fiction part of the story, and though at first I wished you'd done that, now I'm kinda glad you didn't).

I have to admit, I almost quit reading halfway through because the subject is a very touchy one for me and I mostly read fanfiction to get away from reality, but I'm happy I held through. The bullying - the parts where they pretended to be her friends, in particular - hit me very hard, because that used to be my life as well, so I have to say you portrayed that part very accurately.

At some point, I did get frustrated that she wouldn't stand up to those who taunted her, but I guess that was a bit personal for me. I got over my bullies a long time ago (but it did take some time - 6 years, in fact - for me to stand up to them), but seeing her suffer like I did brought some of those feelings of frustration and anger back. I, myself was never driven to commit suicide, but it's easy to see how one push in the wrong direction can have a person making that decision.

What I'm trying to say, I think, is that I appreciate having read this story, even if it wasn't what I was initially wanting and expecting. (Also, sorry-not-sorry for the long ass review )

Keep up the good work, you have a talent for writing

xxx Lilia

Honestly I feel so appalled and i think i should really stop reading your story. I understand that you wanted to portray bullying realistically, but perhaps you've lost your focus of the story. i honestly can't read anymore. It's a pity since I really enjoyed the chapters in the beginning. I loved the character Kit, and honestly I hoped she would find some way out of bullying instead of becoming a passive vicitim. I can understand some viewer's concern with how your writing could come off as encouraging victims to hide their suffering. The story has changed to a bullying story from romance, and I'm so disappointed by Kit in this chapter, how she even gave up on herself by covering up for Lauren's behaviour. I'm sorry you feel the need to make your character suffer unnecessarily long. I'm going to stop reading now , because I'm feeling like at this rate I'm just literally waiting for Kit to off herself in the story. Not that i want her to, of course. It feels like that's what you want for her. Misery and more pointless misery. Humans are stronger than they believe, i would know since I've been struggling to overcome depression and anxiety disorder for a few years now. I wanted to read a story in which the main character finds a will to live through all she went through, not a character that would be going Oh no poor me i can't survive this. It seems to me that you have a sadistic penchant for making your character suffer needlessly long and I'm done with your story. Well, i sure hope you find peace so that you no longer feel the need to put your SI OC through pointless and seemingly never ending pain.

I just started to read this fic just a day and a half ago, and I've finished it already. Usually, I would review every chapter, but I was so hooked, I didn't want to stop reading for a few minutes to write, so I'm putting it all here. Firstly, one bad point (just because I am a bit of a nerd when it comes to things like this and they really stand out to me)- you often used 'you're' incorrectly, in place of your, and while that usually puts me off of a story, it absolutely didn't here because your plot was just so interesting (but please, just check them in future, my love!). Secondly, I don't think I've ever read a bullying plot-line that felt so realistic. Most people do not go for help until it is too late, and Kit's fears about her bullying worsening if she told were one hundred percent accurate. I LOVE that you were able to turn twilight (which was rather cheesey, no matter how much I loved it) into a much more realistic story within your own. You most certainly did not deserve the sh*tty reviews that you got, and I found myself getting irritated with the people who left them. Your writing is truly amazing, and you really did put so much effort and time into getting your story line as close to real-life portrayal as possible. It's difficult to find a good Emmett fic, but you most certainly have written one here. You deserve so much appreciation for this story and I really commend you. Thank you for keeping me fixated and it was a total pleasure to read your fic. I'm looking forwards to the sequel!

I’m sorry but I had to stop reading your story. It was too triggering and made me feel super depressed. Excellent writing though. Hopefully the story outlook improves and becomes more healthy and positive. But I won’t be reading further to see if it does. This is not a negative review/comment! If I was strong enough to continue reading I definitely would!

I’d also like to add that I love how your story is touching on a very real problem in society

You’re story is sooo good. You’ve captured so many emotions and now I’m feeling some very strong ones. I might have to take a break from this cus of all of the heartache it’s causing me.

Hi,

I just wanted to compliment you.
You wrote a beautiful story and it really hit me hard. I’ve been dealing with yearlong bouts of depression for a long time now and Kit’s story really moved me.

I actually had a bit of a breakdown and had to call off work for a day – I was quite distressed. Which I guess is only more of a compliment!

You wrote it so very realistically. I really appreciate that. And I reckon you wrote this from personal experience.
If so, I hope you have recovered well and fully enjoying the beauty of life again.

My best wishes and a big thank you for your courage writing this story,

Pien

Great story

Actually hands down the worst ending I've ever read. It's not a cliff hanger as much as a shameless plug to read the sequel. You legit spent a quarter of the story with your protagonist in a coma and then have her eyes snap open the last sentence? Utter bullshit. The story was good, well written, and it's not like you're a bad writer but wow. The ending isn't abrupt, frankly, it's horrible. I'm so pissed. This was so good and I feel like I just wasted so much time because it's not really complete is it?

So, I stopped reading this story for awhile as it was hitting a little closer to home then I was comfortable with.
I came back though and tried to read it again, but this is where I have to stop.
It's an amazing story, and I love Kit and her family-her relationship with Emery is sweet, but I find it extremely difficult to experience Kits emotions. I wish you all the best with Kit!

I don’t agree with the way Kit is handling being bullied, I’m fairly certain she could block Lauren’s number and email, and that would at least stop all the ‘you should just die’ texts/emails. I have been bullied myself and Kit’s coping mechanism was how I delay with it the first time, it didn’t get better and I eventually realised if I wanted to stop the bullying I would have to do something I stead of roll over and take it.

This book for real made me cry. I've never cried while reading anything on this site. I'm so excited to read the sequel, though I really hope it doesn't lead to as many tears.

Bullying is truly a disgusting act, and I realize that I can't blame Kit or any victim for not having the courage to get help. I just want them to stop, the fact that a fictional story is breaking my heart is telling.

Hey there! I stumbled upon this story in the favourites of another author I’ve been reading.

I have to just say, I am an Emmett fan girl all the way. Of course, I like all of the Cullen men but Emmett was always my favourite. He’s happy and funny and entertaining. He certainly deserved more time to shine than he got in the novels. He’s a nice change up from the brooding that is Edward and sometimes Jasper.

I love the idea that Rose WANTED to Emmett to be her mate but that one thing just wasn’t there between them; whatever it is that makes it completely right between two people, vampire or otherwise. You’ve written the Cullen siblings spot on so far. I loved Rose’s snippy attitude haha.

I really enjoyed the beginning and introduction into Kit’s life family. Indigo is simply precious! I’m excited to see the story unfold for Kit and I’m sooo happy that her story will parallel Bella’s, that should be very interesting. Will she and Bella be close? Will there be just as much drama for Kit when it comes to Emmett as there is for Bella and Edward? Ahh I’m so excited to continue reading and find out.

Also, you’ve got a knack for spelling and grammar. Nothing ruins a story more than sloppy writing. Anywho, I’m on to the next chapter to find out more. I’m so happy to see Emmett getting his moment!

-Katie

I just discovered this story, I really love it, and I love Kit.
I think you've written the bullying beautifully. From personal experience I dealt with the situation similarly to Kit, I don't like being a 'victim' or people thinking that I am or that you're speaking out for attention. So I completely understand where she's coming from in regards to thinking she's over reacting.
But when the bullying first began to now in the story; you can see that the words are starting to weigh heavily on her now.
I can't wait to continue reading and see what you do with it.