I love your story️
yeah there is one out there like it but I like yours better

Great story! Love it!

First, work on your grammar. No sentence should start with a lowercase letter.

Secondly, you really don't need to add rape onto a character's list of crimes to make them look evil, and this is cringe-worthy and presumptuous of you to do so.

To use it as a way to force two character together is even worse. Consider re-writing the plot and not changing Jack's gender for no good reason without any real explanation, especially because we've all see and heard Jack in the movie and he's as much not a female as you can get.

I'm only commenting on this to ask the question, why?
Why do you change the gender of any character? What is the point and reasoning for that? Saying you just wanted to doesn't count as an answer!
If you didn't like the way the original character was, to begin with, why bother to be here at all?
All I see is that you don't like that Jack's male.
Seems like you were turning him into an OC instead of creating your own actual character and leaving Jack Frost as is.
When people put in (Jack Frost) in the Character section, they're wanting and expecting to get the male version to read about, so you should just put this fic under the Character (OC) since that's how you are portraying him.

Also, if you want to write, you need to read books to learn how to write properly.
Always reread your work to look for mistakes. You have misspellings, words/names that need to be capitalized-capitalize the beginning of a sentence as well, and you need to put in punctuations!
I don't care if you were 10 when you wrote this, but you're older now and should fix things in your fics.!

Awesome chap!

This is so awesome!

Please update when you can

I really wish you the best of luck, happy Sinterklaas, merry christmas and a happy new year.

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What a fantastic fic so far. I have loved reading it. Ugh lol cliffy Boo! :) You have a great mind and I am glad You don't let the dyslexia get you. keep at it! I look forwards to reading more and would love to see a bunny/Jackie paring.

please update soon I can't wait to read more

LOVE it!

A little criticism here... You need to revise and redo your grammar. Just in the first chapter I had to force myself to read it. And it progressed wayyy to fast between Jackie and pitch black just in the first chapter. It's a great concept but there is some corrections that need to be made.

This is 90% copied from another fic

Great story