Nice but I think you should have kept going love it

It was a great story! Thank you!

what a bitch sometime someone says something they did not really mean it takes a real person to apologize why is she still with him if she dose not forgive him what he should have said when she threaten to leave there the fucking door go but don't bother coming back i'll send you divorce papers and we'll co-parent

Great story

Love

Brilliant story, I’m sorry it’s over,but all the loose ends nicely tied up. Thankyou. Xx

Fantastic! Thanks for sharing...Denie'

Your writing is lovely and your story is fantastic! Thanks for sharing. Denie'

Your writing is quite smooth, I enjoy that. I was looking for something with a little more creative flair, though. Something with more twists and turns to keep me on my toes; something that explains how a psychopath, aka Christian Gray, becomes so 'normal' almost over night. This is very close to the original story line, with some minor adjustments here and there. EL James didn't really think human behaviour, reactions, character traits, et cetera, through properly when she wrote 50 Shades and it completely put me off. The original story had so much potential, which is why I turned to FanFiction. You have great potential as a writer, that much I can see. I just don't enjoy the story line. Sorry, I'm not flaming. Just a bit of constructive criticism x

beautiful story! I hope at some point in time you do a sequel

wonderful story. thx

Thank you very much for such wonderful story you can do a sequel

I don’t think it’s a dream

No no bother

I knew it was pregnancy but didn’t say okay kidding didn’t know I thought of cancer. On the plane I thought so but after her anxiety attacks I then thought off cancer