Eh Gary Stu or not it was fun to read in a way! I’m a little disappointed but it’s better to know when to stop so you aren’t pushing yourself. Then that’s when you really dislike what you’re writing.

Your story is not bad, it is actually good, but after reading the draft of the following chapters I think that if I had lost interest, regarding the reasons, I think that instead of saving saber, Hachiman should have saved Yui, about Mary Sue Hachiman The only time I felt that was when I hit Kaori's stalker, if a character is different in a fanfiction it is not bad and in essence the anime / LN Hachiman is there in your story only that it is more expressive

Your story is not bad, it is actually good, but after reading the draft of the following chapters I think that if I had lost interest

What... What do you mean forgotten, h-hic, he's getting his own movie and everything.

What a waste, honestly the plot hole which wasn't even mentioned in the story could've taken a different route where hachiman was jogging early in the morning and saw the incident about to happen, the OCC of the characters are fine, this is meant to be a fanfiction after all having it remain the same as cannon without changes just makes it boring.

The specifics of a character can change as long as you give them personality instead of a blank slate, and give them a reason why they exist that's what a character should be.

Sadly my review is to late to change your opinion of this story.

Pokeblocks...are you the incarnation of Hachiman's inner wisdom?

I imagine Hachiman's dad is the sort of dad that watches anime with his children.

This is beautiful. Thanks for letting us readers have the satisfaction of knowing how it turns out.

Regards,
Zeph

What is the point of it all ? It's... pointless.

... and the fanfics are a fine example of what not to do, doing the exact things as in canon for bullshit.

Snafu is kind of a exam of how to not write character relationship, and how vague, pathetic, and pretentious they can be.

It's japan and Snafu, of course the parents are shitty.

I am not a saki fan and even I thought that scene was shallow, I have had terrible fights with family and friends where we both said incredibly hurtful stuff but because of who they are and what they mean to me we work it out, seeing two friends of three years separate after one argument seems unbelievable

Well, i appreciate how you gave valid reasons for dropping.

Heh... the plot was damn good... too bad you dropped it