Reviews for dragon ball 10 |
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Donovan Alexzandr chapter 1 . 7/24 Where's Ben Tennyson? |
Drago - X6627 chapter 1 . 9/30/2019 you have a great story but your grammar needs work and you are repeating said to much there are other words you could have used there are even some sentences that you could have used to show the point of view or who may have been speaking through thought make a pause for them to respond |
NEW-Guest chapter 6 . 3/6/2017 AGAIN: Straight punch FROM VILGAX NOT SURVIVABLE UNLESS you include Gwens Anodite heritage, Please? It started plain bad BUT I do see SOME DEFINITE improvements as you continue to develop the story HOWEVER her knowing AND using KI energy should've taken MUCH longer then just RIGHT OFF THE BAT!? Do you at-least have an editor, Someone look over and correct ANY possible mistakes including grammar errors? If your doing this solo however then you WILL need to double check possibly even TRIPLE check your chapter's BEFORE posting them 5% improvement with this one chapter but you'll need 10 - 15% to get on my radar. |
New-Guest chapter 1 . 3/4/2017 Hmmm... Shouldn't it be (MANA) and (NOT KI)...at-least for Gwen, and a literal punch to the face BY VILGAX...WOULD NOT BE SURVIVABLE AT ALL unless he held back which he NEVER DOES although with Gwens anodite half... I'm not entirely sure. |
Guest chapter 3 . 8/15/2016 Absolute shit, SHIT |
Guest chapter 1 . 8/15/2016 No mother with half a mind would let two teenagers stay in the same room |
Menatron the Angel of Ideas chapter 4 . 7/26/2016 Great as usual. |
Menatron the Angel of Ideas chapter 3 . 7/18/2016 HECK YEAH1 Bout time got Vegeta got knocked down a peg by a female. And to think,Bra isn't born yet. |
Menatron the Angel of Ideas chapter 2 . 7/17/2016 Great as usual. So happy that DBZ is getting a female fighter. AS much as I love it as I said,it's pretty much a sausage-fest. |
Menatron the Angel of Ideas chapter 1 . 7/11/2016 Great start. The DBZ universe could use a strong female role,since as much as I love it,it is pretty much a sausage-fest,as they say. |