This story... It's beautifull. It's original,well thought out and well written. They say that a good story consumes you, that it makes you a part of it, as if you where there, and let me tell you that this story, even if it's short, is ond of the best, most emotionally consuming fanfictions i've ever read. It's even better than allot of books i read. Kudos to you and may you have good luck with your future stories, etc ( i realise i'm kind of late, very much so, but still. Very few people can write as good as you )

I-I'm not crying... I'm not crying! I'M SOBBING!
But yeah, holy moly, this was an absolute joy to read and such a powerful story! I feel it's fitting for Frisk to get that end. Maybe it was the 'tragedy' tag constantly reminding me that Frisk might not make it, but in a way, they did, because the singular timeline was born from their endeavors, no? They 'live on in everyone'.
This is the "best" possible timeline, where Asriel doesn't become Flowey, the amalgamates aren't created, the humans that fall aren't killed for their souls, Asgore and Toriel don't break up, Chara lives on and war on humanity doesn't happen, with everyone living on the surface (I'm guessing the six other humans fell and just stayed around until they could lift the barrier with Chara? It's fun to speculate). One point that it's also fun to speculate about is your Gaster. I wonder what was the horrible future he saw. Maybe a genocide route, with the world being destroyed? Maybe a completely alternate timeline that went horribly wrong but Frisk was able to prevent in the end? Maybe a player deleting Undertale from their computer? Hmm...
I'm guessing this also means that the human orphan Frisk that would've fallen sometime in the future was also sorta... 'deleted' along with the Frisk in this story? They just were never born? I WAS wondering if at a time, there would be two Frisks in the same timeline if Original!Frisk didn't decide to JUMP and just continue living with others... And man, speaking of jumping! That scene where Sans is hugging Frisk and he holds on even tighter when Frisk is gonna JUMP just broke me. It turned me into a sobbing mess. Man.
Yup! A story is good when you finish and you're still turning ideas and emotions around in your head! XD But yes, this was greatly written, fun, emotion-inducing, touching, funny, sad... All that fun stuff! I'm definitively a fan! Keep up the stellar work and thank you for making and sharing this story with us. Best of luck!

I think the perfect phrase up to this point, to describe Frisk's time fxckery messing everything up is: The road to hell is paved with good intentions. Poor Frisk. It feels like no matter what they do, SOMEONE is gonna end up hurt. Either a friend or themselves.
I'm loving this story so far It's easy to grasp and follow, which I love.

I knew it was a bluff.

Summary time! Let's see… Spelling and grammar are acceptable, no plot holes that I can think of. Most characters act how you'd expect them to, though Sans was a bit trigger-happy at one point. I suppose it's understandable, but I'd like to think that it was more than just a promise to some old lady he never met face-to-face making him promise to look after the child that kept him from killing him/her. Oh well, that's just my interpretation. Anyway, the story was interesting and paced well enough. Overall, I give this story 15 sheep out of 17 sodas. *fanfare and confetti*

Yeah, no. No way in hell. At all. Ever.
As a soulless shadow of Chara with no compassion or mercy, the demon that kills Flowey does so without a care or perhaps with glee. Asriel had betrayed them and stopped Chara's plan. Human Chara hated humanity immensely, but he/she didn't hate monsters, and he/she certainly didn't hate Asriel. I'd buy this as maybe a bluff, but really? Killing your own brother in cold blood when he's shown nothing but love and compassion for you? That's a bit much. No way Chara would go through with that.

So, shouldn't Undyne fall for Papyrus now since Frisk sent him to meet her before Alphys? I'm all for that, but I don't think that was your intention.

That pun was too intended, and you know it!

I'll be honest, I'm not the least bit upset Undyne is going for Papyrus instead of Alphys.

The Moon? What?
Christmas?
A radio?

Surprised Frisk knew his name? His bar is named "Grilby's"!

Masterful. Just like Toby Fox would've done it.
"No More Broken Hearts" ElatedEmoElmoEater-2015

this is a great story

The only thing that bugs me is the fact this chapter is called "SAVE Point: Beginnings"
It's the only thing that bugs me, because it means something has just begun and I wanna know what.

As for the story, it's kinda heartbreaking, that Frisk had to go away because they were an Anomaly.

yes PAPDYNE! i HATE ALPHYNE

Damn this is good! just wish there was more... *grumble* *grumble*

awesome chapter

One of the most creative undertale fanfictions ever.