This is great! I love how you get inside Face's head, you write his inner voice really well. It's a very realistic explanation for why he hated the idea of getting married in the episode - we know how heartbroken he was when Lesley left him and you show here how deeply it affected him. I also love the way you've shown that Hannibal realises what he's done and apologises - he knows Face so well, but he just got carried away with his plan.

Its a nice story. You really play up the fact that Face has a injured foot. My only problem is the fact that Face was not the only one hurt when the helicopter crashed it seemed that Hannibal was in a full leg cast and would have been laid up longer than face.

This is great. I loved Face admitting that he wanted a family and Hannibal admitting he was wrong. I Loved the father and son relationship you created between the two men.

I so love this story. I like to get into Face's head. He really wanted to get married to Leslie and start a family with her, but that didn't work out. I do think he was left completely broken hearted after that experience. And then there is the playboy front and his so-called fear of commitment. I think deep down he really did want to get married and have a family of his own. He never did have that except with the guys. And off course Hannibal knew something was bothering him.
This story was really touching. I could sense the pain he was in. But who wouldn't want to become Mrs. Templeton Peck ?

You can have your picket fence with me, Face! I'll stick with you through the missions! Jackie totally wasn't the girl for you, Face:):)
Great story,btw. I loved how you did Face's POV:).

Aww, another sensitvely written angst moment for Face. I like that his PoV gives a bit more dimension to his character. He really does want a normal life more than his flashy, fabricated lifestyle.

Also interesting Hannibal PoV. Also adds a nice twist to that particular episode. But Face should have know he couldn't pull the wool over Hannibal's eyes.

Nice tag-on, muchacha!

Poor poor Face... you can live with me behind my white picket fence.

Poor Face. He may be a playboy, but I'm sure when he finds the right girl, he'll be the most faithful man ever. I liked this story. It showed perfectly what Face seemed to be thinking all through the episode.

Nicely done! Excellent job on 1st person pov. It's my favorite way to write, but it's not always easy. You really did a great job getting into Face's head...this felt very true to canon.