I really like your other Overlord stories, but I am not sure if I can finish reading this one; the grammar and structure are somewhat lacking, and Esdeath isn't simply OP, she's broken. Although being a Player means that you are stronger than anyone else, Esdeath reached a level that even the often critized developers of YGGDRASIL would've banned. If a Player is a hydrogen bomb, Esdeath is Chernobyl. In my opinion it might make the story more entertaining in some aspects, but it also takes away what little challenges Ainz meets. Esdeath would easily defeat Shalltear, for example, and that would be too boring. If a character is (nearly) omnipotent, the story easily stagnates and may become just ridiculous. I think I'll read the rewrite though, and your other Overlord stories, especially since you have improved your grammar and storytelling.

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Lukrut Volve has NO luck with women.

Fun fact: In the Web Novel, the Swords of Darkness is called "Axe of Cyclone".

Lukrut mentioned that the team was all-boys and that a girl would cause serious problems. However, Ninya was discovered by Momonga to be a girl, that cross-dressed as a boy, probably due to such statements being made. That's hilarious!

In the Web Novel, Carne Village was founded 100 years ago by a pioneer named Thomas Carne.