Reviews for A Moment Behind the Mask |
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Birooksun chapter 1 . 5/27/2019 This is wonderful. I absolutely love it! |
Lynxgoddess chapter 1 . 2/14/2017 Very in character. Loved it |
Veleriphon chapter 1 . 10/7/2016 That was good. Damn good. |
EntrancedCat chapter 1 . 9/22/2016 Thanks for the story! Great first effort. You convey Daria's internal monologue very well; I really like how she uses her sarcasm to try to calm herself about the future. And go Mr. DeMartino! I think you're keeping both characters well in character while revealing their thoughts. A couple quibbles: 'churlish' doesn't quite sound right for Mr. D. I don't want to put words in your mouth but to me the word 'brusque' comes to mind. And I think by '...tax deductible...' you probably mean 'tax deduction' or for a school 'tax credit' but to begin with I don't think public schools pay taxes. Anyway, please keep writing. I don't think enough writers try to convey Daria's unvoiced thoughts and you do a fine job. Your avatar is very pretty. |