This wasn't easy to read - and that's how it should be. It meant you did it right and that you carried their emotions through properly. I could feel their hesitation and pain. Well done.

You are a talented writer, my dear friend. I don't just say this because you're my closest friend, either, I say this because it is flat out true. The instances where you've written about emotions rather than just physical lust and attraction - and indeed even then - have proven to me that you can wield the words you write and command attention; you have the skill to make people feel whatever you want them to feel.

It's easy to make one feel aroused, sure, but is it easy to make one feel pain? Is it easy to make one feel specific types of pain? The pain belied here is a deep, emotional pain. While it's also a pain that reveals a hint of relief in the fact that the characters are feeling it, making the reader feel that sort of relief as well. It's understandable, relatable, but it's written so well here that it honestly does feel like the end of something beautiful.

Even without the details and the moments leading up to it, we're given a sense of scope here. We are aware that, while they both want this (the breaking it off), they're both afraid of it. Yet they also have to just accept it. And once it has been accepted, is it any easier to swallow? Absolutely not, but it is made just a bit easier.

Ruby's words, while sweet and true, also ring of desperation. She's just trying her hardest, and that's all she can do.

Excellent short, I do so love the second short as well. Both made me feel things, and that's the biggest compliment a writer can get.

Fantastic job.

Great story

I have mixed opinion about this story. On the one hand it's pretty interesting idea and believable situation, too. But on the other hand it's so... hopeless? So alike to real life. And I don't like it, honestly. RWBY more like fairy tale to me, sometimes fun, sometimes scary, but always beatiful and so blessingly unreal. But I commend good writing nevertheless. I spend more time reflecting on this story than reading it - and not just because I'm a fast reader.

I liked it. Depressing but I liked it.

Well...That was really too close to heart. Loved it, though. Thanks, I guess? Been a while since I felt that emotional.

First of all, I've give 10/10. You could almost feel the pain between the two. Also, YOU HEARTLESS BASTRAD! YOUR BREAKING MY HEART! WHY YOU MUST DO THIS MY OTP. Anyway it was fun reading it keep up the good work. I hope you make more in the future.

...Probably one pf the most depressing things I've ever read. Fuck. Good job Organ