Awwwww. It almost feels like a real episode from Over the Garden Wall. Damn I really love how you portrayed each character. Though you should need to work on your narrative pacing because for me it was quite confusing and fast.
But overall I total love this story. It gave me a warm, fuzzy feeling inside. I also fell in love with your original character. I can't see why this story has only a few reviews and fabs. This deserve much more love.

... Terry Pratchett...You my friend are so cool!

This was cute and fun to read :)