Reviews for The Fall of Italy |
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Blueazul67 chapter 1 . 9/9/2018 WHY CAN'T I STOP CRYING! |
NordicsAwesome chapter 1 . 11/27/2016 This is a great story idea, and so, so sad :'c Some of the sentences were rather long though, and were lacking punctuation such as commas and full stops. It would have been better if you had perhaps made some sentences shorter (it would also have given the sentences more impact) and checked over your punctuation. But overall, a very good idea and a wonderful plot line! |