Sorry you never finish this was a good story.

Please update soon

I really enjoyed reading this, I hope you update it soon!

Adorei sua história mesmo e estou muito ansioso por continuação

truly enjoyed

This is a really great story! The characters have really come to life, and I look forward to the next chapters. I hope Roni gets some therapy under her belt before having to deal with her mother again. And since she likes animals but had such an awful experience with her dog, maybe she could get a cat. :-)

Really enjoyed the story so far hope you continue it and somehow blend in what happens to her mom and the high price lawyer. I know some people write stories with spanking in them and I don’t mind that ,but I want to compliment you on not making a spanking into a abusive statement the way you have them in the story is a form of discipline that you learn from some writers take it too far and it ruins the story. You have done a great job can’t wait for more.
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This is pathetic the little bitch OC is pathetic and how everyone else is around her while steve gets oushed to the side is pathetic!

This story is PATHETIC

PLEASE UPDATE!

PLEASE update! Why would you just stop like that

Houers went by. Roni made third place at the tournement and was now sitting at Kamekonas shrimptruck. She was still angry at her father but somehow seems to undestad why her father is doing what he is doing. To protect her and his home. Deciding she should better apologize, she is about to head for Five O Headquaters when she gets the fake call from Coleman. Thinking it Comes from her father, Roni heads straigt for home.
But once she was inside her house, she was shocked to see Coleman Standing in front of her. But before Roni could react, someone graps her from behind and covers her mouth with a Cloth. After a few seconds, Roni stopps to struggle and fell to the ground unconscious.

When Roni Wakes up severel houers later, she finds herself sitting in the deeps of an cave. Her arms were bind above her head with chains, her ankels are chained as well and her mouth was taped shut. In front of her stood Coleman, smiling and taking a Picture of her with his phone. He then walked away saying " Lets see if your beloved father can save you this time"

Out of the cave, Coleman sends the Picture of Roni to Steve with a text.
" Say good by to your daugther McGarret. I mad sure that you will never find her again !"
After sending the massage, Coleman droves away and smashes the phone so the Signal couldnt be followed. He leaves Roni in there to die painfull from Dehydration.
Will Steve be able to save his daughter in time ? He only has 5 days and Coleman was murdered when Five O storms into his house and Steve has to shoot him to save his own live. Colemans last words where : " And ? How are you going to find your kid know ?"

PLEASE DO ME THIS FAVOR ! IF IT DOESNT FIT INTO THIS STORY THAN PLEASE MAKE IT A NEW ONE. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE !

Coleman broke out of prision and hids himself very good since over a month now. And he has only one Goal... to take revenge on Steve McGarret. And the best way of that is to take away what means the most to him. And that of Course is Roni. So he sends out a few of his men to spy on Steve and Ronis every move. And so find out the best time to strike. Steve and Roni dont notice that they are observed and that has big consecuenzes. And then Coleman found his Chance. One morning, Steve and Roni have a fight. Roni was so excited that her father was coming to watch her fight in a martil Artist tournement. Steve didnt had much time in the last weeks and that made Roni even happier that he could be there to watch. But one houer before the tournement starts Steve got a call that they have a new case. Ane track on Coleman. Steve tries to apologize but Roni doesnt want to hear it. She runs to the tournement with the yell : " Your Job isnt Special ! Any Police officer can do that !"
One of Colemans observers watch the Scene and tells it to his boss. This brings Coleman to an great idea. He knows that deep down Roni loves her father very much and would come straigt to help him. So he copied Steves cell phone and sends Roni a fack massage, telling her that Steve was injured and needed her help at home.

I really really like this Story and I think its very sad that you stopped updating it. But I have an idea of how you could continue with the Story. I wanted some more Action for Steve and Roni.
I have readed the Story at least ten times and my idea Comes from a dream I had.

3 mothes have passed since Roni and Steve started to live together. And it couldnt be better.
Roni Harris... or now Roni McGarret goes to School by now and is a member of a teenage martil arts Club and is one of the best fighters. Her free times she spends with her Family, friends or with drawing. Her mother, Coleman and Fuller are in jail for the rest of their life and Roni was finally able to Forget her past and move on. She may have a nightmare from time to time but thanks to her father and friends theres nothing she cant handle.
But the peace is about to get destroyed and Roni is in danger once more. And this time its even more dangerous.

I send the idea in two more Reviews.

I check everyday for more! Please consider continuing this great storyline. Thank you.

Please Update