I adore this story you seem to have a great talent in writing my only critique would be space out your longer paragraphs by adding small breaks so you’re not reading a wall of text, but other than that you’re good

Good chapter, cant wait to see more

This would be much nicer to read if it wasn't just 2 blocks of text.
I gave up after 2 lines.

It sucks that that happened to your USB. I can only imagine what the story would be like if it didn't break(which I'm pretty sure it would be a kickass story.) I believe that you can pull through this though and continue the story. Best of luck to you.

Hey good going keep up the work and sorry about the USB or what ever it was update soon and please if you can make the chapters longer

If there was a new Noble 7 fic resting at the bottom of the San Diego Bay, half of the readers in this game category would not hesitate to jump off the Coronado bridge to get to it.

Well, you said to review so I'm doing so.

The summary piqued my interest and I'm intrigued by the idea. However, the execution is lacking majorly, and I can spot several grammar mistakes; these disrupt the flow of your story, and the speech isn't too polished up. Now, I can see you're trying and I get that, but the skill to write comes first, sadly, not the imagination. Learn that, then delve deeper into your own story. To be honest, I would like to know his story of survival on Reach for those isolated years, and what that may have done to his mind, body, and soul. That seems like a better idea that'll lead up to your main one, but, hey, this isn't my story.

Cheerio,

FoC