This was marvelous from start to finish. It took a lot of build it and crafting in order to get the final result, while short, it was extremely fitting. I hope there's a sequel.

D4rK

YOU ARE gifted :)

Sequel would be aweeeesoooome

I loved this story and I loved your writing... Would you accept an idea for a kind drama idea for a Star vs the Forces of Evil?

Wonderful story. The ending was pretty satisfying and adorable. Thanks for the hard work and the detail you put into it.

-FlygonNick

I remember reading this story a while back and damn, was it something. Your story does a ton of things right but one thing you should be proud of, is how in-character everyone is. It makes this story feel like a wonderful continuation post 'Bon-Bon The Birthday Clown', and looking back...what I would have liked Season 3 to end up becoming.

Marco's character here though...man, I loved it. From exploring Star's version of Disney Land (that was such a creative chapter), Marco & Star going on a grand pirate adventure, the truth about Star & Marco's bond being touched on and Star kicking Marco out of Mewni later in the story; Marco faces a lot and grows, but how he interacts with everything makes it so interesting.

The final chapter though was wonderful, being a great conclusion to the confused relationship between Star and Marco. This was one of the early stories alongside 'Starfall' that got me into reading & writing fan-fiction, as I have vivid memories of spending four hours straight reading your story and loving every moment of it.

Hope that in the future, you write more amazing stories but for now, this is a great piece that shows your art of writing. Great work :).

ahhhhhhhhhh... absolutely love it. the dialouge was just so good between them. im also glad you took Jackie into consideration as well. i feel the portrayal of the charcters was very accurate. fantastic job.

Holy freaking shit that was good, I spent 3 hours just reading this story and my goodness was it worth it, the ending was just a great ending to this story.

Loved the way you wrote this fanfic, the ending was well made, even though i wanted more i feel satisfied, thanks for this great read, hope you do a sequel because i ended up wanting more, meanwhile i give you my follow and favorite.

This is an absolutely incredible story and I got completely hooked into the story. I read the entire story from beginning to end today and it blew my mind on how you wrote it. My only regret is that you did not continue it. I I very much hope that you either choose to continue this or write a sequel. I think I speak for all the readers in saying the sequel would be a major hit.

Why do u think toffee and star are related that's just dumb and eclipsa's husband doesn't look like toffee at all and if he is where are his marks why is he so odd little looking should he be looking like his mother or father

I'll be honest, I didn't expect much when I started reading this one. I pretty much picked it up because it was a long-ish complete story. Turns out, I was wrong. Very well written, the miss Heinous initial parts were quite confusing at first but still quite entertaining, and only made more and more sense as I went on. A... how to call it... "connective thread" through the whole story executed that well is always appreciated. Liked a lot the cultural worldbuilding, all the characters were spot on (Buff Frog... Ivankov? I really like how you portayed him) and damn, the romance part of the story was written in an actual competent and belivable manner, with both its highs and lows!
Really, really liked this story. Don't know if you are going to write more, or if this author account was created just for this one story and you have others, but if you do, let me know, I would love to read more from you!

That was one of the cuter things I've read. Very nice.

I can't really offer any criticisms. At one point I saw a missing quotation mark. You seem to get to and too mixed up every know and then. Just make sure to reread your story or get someone to do so, they'll sort those things out for you.

Personally, I find the whole destined to be together thing to be a bit of a stretch!
I would prefer them to be together due to serendipity.

Wow, this story is DEEP and human!
Way to go!