OOOOOOOOOOWWWWW OWWWW, WHY?

omgz! I like it up date soon oh he must be mad

Normally I read RL or HG fics. I, as rule, dislike OOC fiction. I don't even remeber how I ended up on this story. After reading it all the way through to the other website I can honestly say this is one of the best I have read. I think you broke my heart at least once if not more. Amazing work.

not happy not happy not happy! ga! Ok, I need to go read the REAL ending now! Needless to say, i enjoyed the story :) ... till the last chapter... :(

Lissa

ahh! Can't believe she rejected him ..

but then I'm just going to ignore this chapter and head straight to AFF :) Thank you for this story.

You need to write more Snape/OFC ... you're a great writer.

Just curious are you a male or a female?

ah he doesn't even recognize her!

ashh Snape sniffing *grins*

I was hesitant to continue reading this story because I never believe in Student/Professor relationship ... but ex-student/professor is a different story hehe ...

haha thank you for making Snape stay in character in this chapter ...

lol it's quite weird to fall in love with a man she doesn't even know...

This is the most amazing story out of 100,0,0,0,0 stories that I have read on internet archives. It's so realistic I can believe it completely. And evocative. I had all of her feelings churning around in me so much that I felt completely nauseous, a feeling that you mentioned actually. I will definitely check out the other ending. You have crazy amazing writing talent and I hope you are using it elsewhere because it deserves to be read.

I really liked the first chapter, it's very well written.

Hello, here are some constructive comments for you. I am enjoying your story so far, or I would not have read past the first half of the first chapter. Oh, wait, the first chapter was too short to have a first half.

After 4 chapters I have come across several grammatical mistakes. Do you employ a beta? Try not to make your chapters so short just to make it look like you have a lot of them.

A few short ones here and there for transitions, or to make a specific event more visible, are okay, but it gets very stilted and a bit dull. Very dull, actually. So much so that I skipped the last four.

Avoid Mary Sue's too, especially if the writing is so short that the character isn't allowed to develop. (Your main characters come across as Mary Sue's.)

I really liked that letter. Very well written.

Wow. You are sure good at bringing on the sexual tension! Again, your characters are believable, especially Snape. Can't wait to read your second ending .. but the adult fanfic is down again, as is usually the case. You are an excellent writer!

I just checked this fic out again last eve and was surprised and glad to see you had written two more chapters (and )

The sex scene was a bit more perfunctory than I had expected (seeing as the chptr prior was dripping with sensual promise) but then perhaps Snape was trying to approach her in a distant manner so as not to provoke his want and need to have her again physically. I'm certain this will backfire on his part - seeing that your cliffhanger left us with him knocking upon her door...what could this late night call be for? hm. ;)

I really appreciated your little twist and revelation as we come to find out that he saved her life yet AGAIN. But before that, the scene starts out with a provocative question on Snape's part: "Was I everything you ever dreamed of?" and she then proceeded to belittle the reality of him in comparison to what perfection she had always imagined about his character. Walking away from him - leaving him with his flawed self. Which leaves us with a double message about Snape. Does he have a vested interest in this woman-no-longer-a-girl even though he continuous to acts cold and aloof?

Btw, I've reviewed your fic quite a while ago on my site Dark Potions. Do keep up this story - it has potential!



Btw, I noticed that you had posted links on Veresnas Veneries II and I thought I'd suggest that you post the links instead to that group. Thanks!

why did you stop there is it possiable to get a better ending or better yet dont end it please please , i waited so long for this please dont end it in such a bad way ... i liked it till the bad ending change SVP :(

Sheesh, even if that WAS the ending, it's pretty darn lousy. No offense, but you can't just end it like that! But I guess I can understand if you're working on other stories. Speaking of which, when are you updating your other one? I've been waiting forever!

~stefynae