Hermione pissed that Harry is self-reliant? Idiot

More! More! More! Great story line, your plot is very different and interesting

i love this story can't wait for you to continue it and find out what happens next ?

Lovely story.

Still waiting for the updates!

This is a good story you have written so far. It's not the first story of yours I have read, but it's the first I have written a review for. Sorry about that.

I sincerely hope that you are planning on continuing this. Please. Bitte? I like how you are handling character growth and development. As someone else already said, your troubled Hermione feels real, believable. And I could just see Harry gritting his teeth and saying, "I'm going to make this marriage work." It's also nice to see a non-stupid Ron, who is growing up into a reasonable human being.

I must admit that I cannot understand where these folks are coming from who do not like your long chapters. Of course, I read fanfiction (a) on a computer not a phone, and (b) only when I have at least 30 minutes to devote to it, so maybe I'm missing something.

I also want to express my great admiration for every non-native English speaker who takes up writing fanfiction in English, from you here on FF dot net to BigHead over on Twisting the Hellmouth, and every non-native English speaker in between. I am an American; English is my native language, my mother tongue. I speak or read a few others, but when I try to imagine writing a story in even my second-best language, let alone any of the others . . . let's just say the results would not be wunderbar.

You, however, should keep going. Danke!

I've avoided this story for the last few years just for the bruno Mars reference. But this is very sweet, a lovely story that builds nicely with 2 folks trying to make it work. I'm a big fan of your writing and I wish you would continue. It seems like you're just a few chapters from finishing. But considering you push 15-25k words each chapter I'm not surprised. Good character development, and actual plot points that aren't just petty bickering.

super sad because i want babies

Ah man I somehow thought this story was already finished, but I must have looked wrong. It has been a while since this was updated. Do you have any plans to continue or is this on hiatus?
I am liking the story so far and am curious to see where you will take it!

So good keep writing!

I hope you update soon I really love this story.

I was sent here through a Muggledad recommendation in one of his latest chapters and found the story to be a fun read. That said, I think you got a little too into making the Greengrass family a dysfunctional snobbish mess. See, the family works as they've been written but only when everything else in the story is ignored.

Andy says they're a solid family who remained neutral - Cyrus Greengrass is so obsessed with selling his daughter to the Death Eater Nott family that he tried to shift it to the brother when the older one was killed.

Harry Potter is the man who defeated Voldemort and comes from an old and somewhat respected family. So instead of being shocked and maybe seeing the plus side of Daphne marrying the Man-Who-Conquered (and who would have a LOT of political power), the parents immediately wanted a divorce and turned into just constant cold-shoulder, passive-aggressive attitudes to show their displeasure.

And that's the problem. The parents and how they're acting work perfectly in a story where the daughter hasn't married a highly influential, extremely powerful warrior from an old, wealthy family. If he's just a working-class Joe, then it all fits. But he isn't. So they come across as morons forced into being like this to play up the way the story/writer imaged them to be.

I'm not saying this to be cruel. The story outside of the Greengrass' work really well and as I've said, they too are good for what they're supposed to be. The issue comes in that the two aren't that compatible with how it's been put together.

With that out of the way, I really did enjoy how you explained Alex Potter not being in the books. It was JK's biggest mistake in having a hissy fit over everyone calling Charlus and Dorea James' parents enough to make Euphemia and Flemont.

I can't say I'm a fan of Harry feeling guilt over the Dursleys situation but it's something that seems to be easy to write in fanfic to get him over his anger at the way they raised him. I honestly think that type of guilt is poisonous and those around Harry need to get him to stop with it since it was all totally out of his control. That said, the scene where Harry and Daphne visit the Dursleys was done maturely.

The relationship between Harry and Daphne is a bit strange and that's really down to how hazy the timeline is for the story. The romantic scenes between them are nicely written but they feel inconsistent with the time passing of the story. It's very hard to tell the depth of the romance as the story paints them as being loving partners who work together yet are still learning about each other. I'm not sure exactly what it is about the entire thing that's jarring to me but there's no real sense of organic growth matching time spent together.

Don't get me wrong, I know that secrets aren't all shared at once and things take time to be opened up about. I think my issue is that there feels like a disconnect between how close the couple get and how much Harry shares with Daphne over the same period of time. The sheer amount of stuff Harry doesn't share before they're a loving partnership (and also physical lovers?) is what throws me.

Hermione's attitude is perhaps one of the best I've seen in the fandom when it comes to a moody and disappointing best/ex-friend. You've really done your best to show a young woman with a major problem but who hasn't turned into a parody of an angry friend. Even when you get them back to Hogwarts it's a very grounded and organic way she acts towards the entire situation.

That said, I'm not entirely sure I like the unrequited love between Harry and Hermione. I enjoy Harry/Daphne pairings but Harry never came across as a teen who would sleep with someone without loving them. At least not a second time. It makes sense with how you kept pushing Hermione's attitude but it felt like it was a step that didn't need to be taken in the problems between them.

You did a great job in making Molly Weasley a three-dimensional character during the get-together at the Burrow.

I also really like how you matured Ron. It's again very organic and natural in how he changes through the story.

Another thing I enjoyed was your depiction of both Auror Robards and the entire investigation. You made the all the Aurors actually competent when a lot of people wouldn't or would try throwing in some type of blood purity issue that keeps the investigation from getting any information but you did it in a way that also didn't allow Nott/the mastermind to be easily caught. You had Robards acting like a mature adult which is a really great surprise.

A fun read. I've got a few problems with how some of the story turned out since it feels like parts are done for the drama rather than it fitting the world of the story but I still enjoyed the read and am looking forward to seeing where it goes from here.

I keep trying to work out who their nemesis is, but come up indecisive. Nott, with someone else pulling the strings? Gideon, who is seeing Astoria to get close to Daphne and Harry? Decisions, decisions!

Haphne is an amazing couple. Truly great to read a fanfic of this quality about them.
I wonder if our lovely blonde Slytherin is starting to get pregnant ?! :O (Maybe it's my wish to see her becoming a sweet mom that makes me say that.)

update soon please