Adorable!

I tried to give this fic the benefit of the doubt but its just bad.

1. The fact that Steve had sex with an intoxicated women goes against hid values. Its borderline rape. A man brought a drunk woman to his place and ends up having sex with her while she's not capable of rational thought. Thats messed up and the fact that no one batted an eye, apart from being shocked that Steve finally gave it up is crazy. Also, he was brought up in a time of waiting till marriage and he sticks with his morals, whats right and wrong, and would not just give it up to a random woman who may or may not be completely sane and that he knows nothing about. This is all OOC.

2. The entire plot seems rushed. Like, I get she doesn't want to wait and wants to tell Steve ASAP, but its two days and she can't wait so she basically kidnaps Tony? Its ok tho, "because he wasn't hurt" just knocked out and carted to a different fucking continent. And she doesn't know where Wakanda is, so how can she apparate there?

3. She was kicked out of the Aurors for something they all probably suffer from, PTSD, but she wants to go back and work for the people who voted that she's mentally unstable. Not only that, but she wants to go work for the American Ministry, while she's pregnant, wtf? Thats just irresponsible and what mother would work in a dangerous environment while pregnant. After, she's gonna need time off to give birth so of course no one will hire her. The person who refused her the job has more regard for her baby than her. She's acting like a dumb bitch. Also, its not okay to just reveal your secret of being a witch to muggles who you haven't married, PERIOD. But its ok if Wanda waltzes in the American ministry cuz she "already knows." That goes against the entire statute of secrecy but fuck it right? This seems unnecessary to the whole plot. She has enough money to live, so why was she so desperate to get a job that she would risk her baby? DOES NOT MAKE SENSE!

4. There isn't much interaction between the dumbass, Charlotte, and the rest of the team, including Steve, so why would she take a big risk, possibly losing her baby, just cuz she wants to prove herself in Russia. The whole team is there, so she isn't needed. She seems average in skill, her power in duels haven't been shown, she seems like an average witch, maybe less since she doesn't think, nothing special about her like the original Harry Potter.

I normally love all fem HP fics, but this is so OOC, I don't even see her as fem Harry. I've lost interest ten chapters ago, but I thought it would get better. I was wrong. I've stopped reading and this was such a waste of time to read.

Baby machines hate that the left tony in bucky in new y9rk but good

His boss without being married

Natty got shot but still char needs to fuck take a real vacation

Bucky sexy as be all

So good

Funny

Walk of shame

Char steve

A very interesting story.

You know, I wanted to read the entire thing before leaving my review but I can't keep going. I'm not trying to be cruel or mean towards you I just want to let you know how I feel about this fic.

1. The reason Charlotte lose her job is a shitty one. I mean, suposedly some people in her team has a similar breakdown but she is the only one who is fired. Really? And then she keeps going back to the same f*king people who fired her and treat her like a lunatic... Jesus, has she no dignity? And why does she wants to be an auror so desesperatly when you wrote in chapter 16 "she wanted it to stop" among other things that leaves me to think that Charlotte does NOT want to be an auror that badly? And despite that she tries, while pregnant lol, to become an american auror... She tries AGAIN AND AGAIN to be an auror. Why? The whole thing makes me feel irritated and confused.

2. The whole romantic bussiness between Charlotte and Steve is non existent. They have sex one night, great, she is pregnant from that one night stand, great, she contacts him and tells him the truth, great, and they have a total of a 1 rushed date and them BANG! they are in love and going to be married. Again... The whole thing is rushed. While I was reading their interactions I felt nothing for this couple.

3. Harry Potter has a golden heart and he feels like he needs to save his people every single time, and that is ok. This Charlotte is an idiot and has no brain. The first time she rushes to help the team is the only one time that makes sense to me for her to be there. She is f*king pregnant. I figure she doesn't want to stay back while her friends are fighting but... really? Does she care more about a team of strangers than her own baby when she got hurt the first time already? Or, can we talk about the puking blood thing? I really, really don't understand. Who in his/her right mind waits 2 f*king weeks while puking blood while being pregnant before having a medical exam? And Bruce? Is he another dumbass in this fic or I'm missing a subplot in this story? My god. What an idiotic future mother. I just can't picture a mother, or someone with a functioning brain, rushing pregnant and putting into danger a kid like Peter. Charlotte is 27. Teenager Harry Potter lost his godfather because of a rushed decision but then when the war started he broke up with Ginny despite being in love with her because he feared for her life. This fem!Harry couldn't be more different from the real Harry.

I could had been great but I felt like it fell short.

So far, this is an amazing story. I really like the plot and premise, and your character development with Steve is, in my opinion, totally realistic.

However, Charlotte is a frustrating character. I'm having a couple of issues.

Firstly, I have a pretty big problem with how cavalier she seems to be about going into battle whilst pregnant. She never seems to worry about the possibility of her babies getting hurt and/or her injuries leading to possible complications with the pregnancy and birth. She's in her second trimester and, while it's technically a more stable time during the babies' development, I don't think it's acceptable for her to jump into the front lines. She could have been useful as support, magicking their gear and making them things that the Avengers could use during and post-battle. She could have even been a field medic and stayed in relative safety but be near enough to the fights. But she always seems to want to "lead the charge", so to speak, and I just think that it's a very selfish and beyond reckless attitude considering her present situation.

Also, it's understandable that her PTSD could/would kick in at inopportune times and that could/would lead to her freezing and/or messing up in the field. But the thing that makes Charlotte a strong fighter is that she is able to think quickly on her feet, especially in times of crisis. She's proved that when she's had to face Voldemort multiple times as a teenager. She's not book smart like Hermione and she isn't particularly good at strategizing like Ron. Her ability to adapt to the situation on hand is what makes her a dangerous opponent. I know your blurb (plot summary) warns "slight OOC", but I think the changes you've made to her character is more than slight. Here she seems to waver between wanting to fight and then just freezing when she is actually in battle. I feel like there may be a continuity discrepancy? Not sure how you and people will receive this, and I want to emphasize that this is a totally personal opinion!

And lastly, her disappearing without even giving Steve a heads up was a d**k move, plain and simple. Again, it's understandable that she feels guilty for what happened with Peter, but this is really not the way to handle the situation.

But I'm really enjoying reading this story and can't wait to finish it.

That was wonderful.

GREAT