When I first read this fanfiction, I really liked it (obviously - it went on my favorites list). I still like it, but I spotted three problems that became more and more glaring the more I read it.

1. "I did look for you, you know." DID he? Because Keith strikes me as the kind of guy who would actually FIND something he really wanted to find. He only had six (he said later twelve, but we can excuse that as vague memories and exaggeration) other people around him besides Lance, so that would have been seven people total to investigate. This is not an impossible task - not for Keith. I don't believe he really did look for his soulmate.

2. These Soul Marks are a scorpion and a lion. Two completely different animals. And instead of being on the same wrist, which you said was normal, they're on opposite wrists. How did Pidge automatically jump to the conclusion that Lance and Keith were soulmates? Was Lance's pained floundering about how he didn't need a predestination making someone HAVE to put up with him, "name-dropping" Keith, enough for her to connect the dots? Because that just seems a little out there; Hunk might be able to make that jump, because if I remember canon he had some awareness of Keith from the academy and probably knew about the "rivalry" (he'd be able to look at this situation and realize what Lance was doing), but Pidge's background with Keith STARTED the night they rescued Shiro so she would have less info with which to reach a conclusion.

3. The entire conversation between Lance and Keith was...well, here's how I read it. Lance told Keith that he didn't want to force anyone to endure him, Mark or no - and Keith was basically like, "forget about ALL that and feel guilty for not coming forward ages ago." And what was with the punch - and calling Lance an idiot? How did he NOT see the inferiority complex Lance had been living with for almost four years, how much Lance was already hurting in that conversation? Lance was trying to get Keith's attention by challenging his record - and actually, reading between the lines, I'm guessing the only reason Lance "hated" Keith was because all that effort turned out to be wasted: when they met each other again during the rescue, Keith didn't even remember Lance. I'd be a little ticked-off and feeling inferior myself if I'd been trying to impress a peer, only to find out later that they so little appreciated it that they didn't even notice. Keith needed to be the one to apologize first - because seriously, if he HAD been looking for his soulmate, it clearly never occurred to him that some people would act tough to/try to impress their soulmates. Lance was so desperate for his soulmate's attention that even hostile behavior was welcomed (not a healthy relationship), and KEITH pushed him to that - accidentally, sure, but it was still his fault. Also, in WHAT ways did Lance hide? He wasn't hiding, but he wasn't pushing himself and his Mark forward; he was just doing his thing, hoping Keith would notice him. That apology shouldn't have been for hiding, but rather for not getting up the courage to just face Keith with the Soul Mark.

Wow, this review got really long. I love this fanfiction, I really do, but that conversation just doesn't make sense to me.

Okay, I have just one question connecting to this story.

"Kogane snorted and slipped past him."

Does Keith have any actual explanation for the appearance of hating Lance on sight and avoiding eye contact with him and everything, or was he just choosing to forget that that happened?

Other than that, great fic!

FAN!~

Why did you choose the scorpion for Keith and not the red lion or the red lion with some black detail? Great story though I love them together!

I see what you did with the marks

This was really sweet. This is one of the most accurate Soulmate AU's I've ever read.

Everything except change of settings and time skips was wonderful.

it's kind of hard to tell the transition of time, like when they move from the Garrison to the castle, but other wise it's a good story

I like this. It real at a le, sweet has a touch of reality, nice writting...good job

beautiful