You had her die offscreen!? WTF it’s like determined to rob yourself of powerful story beats.

This story is so close to greatness but you keep dropping the ball. It hurts to read. She has no aura, no semblance, no guns, and is wielding unfamiliar weapons against opponents she’s never even conceived of let alone fought against. Kill her and give her the chance to learn and improve herself, or continue writing a Mary Sue Dark Souls story

She needs to die more otherwise you trivialize the enemies and world of dark souls along with shooting yourself in the foot for character development. How can she grow as a person if the mistakes she makes doesn’t impact her negatively, giving her the need to learn from them? We as readers lost all suspension of disbelief when she opened a mimic chest and was not eaten. Dark souls isn’t gentle, it curb stomps you from day one and rapes you continuously. This story should reflect that

Wonderful as always. I like the way you're talking. Are you going to give pyrrha some other weapon or armor?

It seems kind of strange how pyrrah doesn't question her lack of aura since it should have protected her from the crossbow bolt and the knife. Don't know if this is going to be explained later but either way I hope it does. Other than that it seems to be a pretty solid story so far

Sulyvahn's more of a tree person than a corvian, but whatever works I guess.

You are an amazing storyteller, my friend. I love your interpretation of Dark Souls 3, the way you seemlessly blend together the game's stories and characters with Pyrrha's story, those of characters from the other Souls games (nice Bloodborne tie-in, by the way) and even a few characters of your own. Keep up the fantastic work!

Thanks for the chapter.

My favorite part of the story was when Phyrra met Siegward and Greirat underneath the castle. Seeing Phyrra just relax with them felt good. A change of pace from the mucky environment. Seeing Greirat struggle to hold his liquor felt real. He is a thief that barely makes it through life. Stealing just to survive. So it would make sense he wouldn't be used to alcohol.

I companied about this before yet I will do it again. Their are to many characters to keep track of. In the game, its easy to follow their story because the characters rarely interact with each other. After reading the story, I don't even remember how many people are in the group.

Oooowwwww now it's getting good.

Awesome story, when's the next chapter going up, I hope to see more soon.

imps use the flamberge not the zweihander also their called thralls not imps

AHH LEDO IS COOL AS FUCK

The Bearer of the Curse is here too?! Then does that mean the Chosen Undead will be here too?!

So the Bearer of the Curse is basically Skull Knight? Cool.

Pssst wanna know a secret?

Yuria best girl m8

Man I’m dumb I thought the knight was solaire which would have been cool all well I’m like if your story so far