This is simply one hell of a chapter, sorry guys, you didn’t tried fighting hard enough. It’s time to git gud. Great chapter.

whoa great job

You? The new ruler of Remnants? Please! Don’t make me laugh! If it happened, I’ll destroy a whole world and rebuild it after that! Great chapter.

Not bad of a story so far. Curious to see where you'll take it. My only question is simple... from what I've read up to this chap? Are you trying to get your character a harem? :3

Hey man, glad to see that you're back in the saddle. I'll be looking forward to seeing how this arc plays out since Ex-Aid is one of my absolute faves

For once I actually don't mind that Shocker mooks are getting their asses kicked because, well, they're mooks.

This story so far is pretty much something that I would agree with an earlier guest review about making fun of on SpaceBattles.

Just finished blasting through every chapter and I gotta say...if I had known that yours existed that I wouldn't have thought up the Rider Links, since they're pretty much a one-to-one copy of the Rider Totems in your story.

Anyway, this story is pretty good. It's got some flaws and there are a few things that I have gripes with like the occasional grammatical error, but other than that you make great tributes to the various Heisei Riders while at the same time not forgetting about what made early RWBY special. I can't wait to see what you have in the works next.

Alright. It's nice to see that you're back. The story is good. I'll point out some good traits and bad traits that I found with the story.

Nico! She pretty enthusiastic as usual. Although I do question why would you give her a Bugvisor. I know it might be a power-up for her, but I what made Nico interesting as a Rider was that she used her environment to her advantage. Unlike most riders, she can't jump high, so she used balloons to help gain High Ground to perform her kick. Also, she uses trickery sometimes. At times you think she'll do a kick, but instead, it'll be a punch.

Also for Dan Kuroto, I don't think you captured his personality that well. No offensive, but I was expecting him to scream, laugh uncontrollably, and look down on pretty much everybody. I was expecting his introduction to say. "For I am...NEO SHIN DAN KUROTO!" Or whatever he calls himself. Or, when he was fighting, he could have said. 'BOW BEFORE YOUR GOD!" They way you write Dan, is that seems to calm manner. When Gamedaeus called him out for his treachery, I was thinking he could say something like "That is true, but I have transcended beyond that pitiful state! I have been reborn, as a true god! A divine deity! A..."
"A shut your yap and start fighting!" is what Lazer would say after that. You did a good job writing his overconfident personality, but YOU NEED TO MAKE DAN, CRAZIER! He's a meme for a reason.

Also, for Kyle's background, one of my main gripes is that I don't get why he was surrounded by so many jerks. Of course, jerks exist, but you would think that he would meet nicer kids that are willing to help him out. I mean, society is like a two-sided coin. You got a bad side, and you got the good side. However, the way you write about Kyle's backstory, it feels like he didn't grow with a lot of good people. I'm not saying it's a bad thing to show bad people. We do need antagonists to move the plot, but all the kids that alienated him, feel too aggressive. At this point, I don't getting my idea across, since I fumble with my words, but, try to show more good people Kyle's life. Aside from Nathan. Like a random person coming to his aid, and help because he wanted to help. If you ask me, being Nice is the norm that our society should follow. This world is that rotten as we make it out to be.

A couple more things, the Drago-Knight Gashat doesn't really require four people. Brave and Snipe used it together to team up on Ex-Aid once. So, technically they lack more manpower but would still be able to use it. It's like how in Monster Hunter, you can go in with up to four people, but you still go with three and still be successful. Also, I don't have a gripe against zombies, but I feel like these Zombies should run. I mean not that many people could get hurt by slow, walking, stumbling zombie. Of course, they come in big numbers, but against a well-equipped Huntresses and Riders, you would think they would have an easy time. Plus, I can help but think that if Snipe, Nora, and Ren just jumped up to the higher ground, they could just shoot endlessly, and not worry about having to get injured at all. Plus, there's no drawback for going all out on them. Nico did say that there is no worry hitting them. If Nora can use her hammer on them at maximum power, there is no excuse that can just full assault attack mode on them. Running Zombies, on the other hand, that's scary. Zombies are categorized as Walking and Running. A Walking is slow, and but they're harder to kill, requiring more resources to kill. Which is not a problem for the Huntsmen and Riders. Running Zombies are easier to kill, but the main horror factor behind them is that they move in hordes. The more you kill the more that come. Plus there's a sense of urgency, to prevent them from reaching the citizens, and the need to think smart. So, I think it would be a bit more of a challenge for our heroes.

Unless I'm missing something vital about the Zombie outbreak, then that's my thoughts.

Also, try to avoid to much inner dialogue between heroes during fights. It breaks the flow of combat. It's okay to write a couple of remarks and comments, but not a full discussion. Takes away the seriousness. Basically, they're in the middle of a ZOMBIE OUTBREAK. You would think they would focus more on attacking, and only talking if deemed necessary.

Look, I'm no expert, so take my criticism with a grain of salt. All in all, you're doing pretty well. Just take this as advice from a person who enjoys the fic. Also, for Doomarine64 and the other haters; just ignore them. In fact, don't mention them at all in (A/N) sections. It's just best to ignore them. If one does type you a worthless PM message. Just be like Saitama and say 'ok'. They feed on attention. Also, one more thing, when do you plan on adding Build and Cross-Z? I can see the Muscle-brained monkey getting along with Yang, and Egotistical Physicist boasting about his genius when Ruby compliments his weapons and gear. One more thing, did you introduce Godai Yusuke yet? I feel like he can give Kyle a good life lesson about emotions. He did unleash anger on a poor sad Grongi one time, so I think a conversation between the two would be meaningful. Unless you did that already since Kyle did get Kuuga's powers.

Did I mention I'm going start binge-watching most of the Heisei rider series, starting for Kuuga? I just finished Kuuga and planning on watching Agito next. It's so I can appreciate ZI-O's cameo appearances much more.

Like I said, I've might have missed something. Feel free to correct me if I did. However, YOU NEED TO MAKE DAN CRAZIER!

You’re back! I’m so glad you come back again! Do you know how long I’ve waited for the new chapter!? Oh and ninjarider1, nobody review after your guest review you say? Well, what am I? Guess what kid, as long as I’m here, this story will always have a review you dumb shit! I will see this story to the end! And you DCD10unite, just do things you love to do as always. Great chapter!

Kamen Rider Nico?

Shouldn’t It Be Kamen Rider Snipe Since Nico Gets That Kamen Rider Form In The Live Stage Show?

Also I Love To Fuck Blake’s Sweet Pussy All Night!

Wow.

You can’t even spell human right which shows how shitty your story is, fuckboi~!

There’s also the fact nobody reviewed after my guest review shows how popular it is!

Too bad you don’t know how much shit you’re getting on spacebattles! LOL

Be constructive, huh?

Why don't you accept that this story is terrible with your OC self-insert just like what EternalKing is saying in the review section?

Is it really hard to admit this story went bad when chapter 2 was posted?

yo, Aku gak kira kamu org indo yg bikin fanfic dlm bhs inggris xD toh aku jg sama. Ngomong" ceritanya bagus gan, semangat brooo. Baru baca sampe chapter 8, ntar lanjut lagi, wkwkwk

ANNOUNCEMENT!

I made a rework of Chapter 2 and in case some of you haven't noticed, I also added a scene in Chapter 6 between Ruby and Ozpin. Tell me what you think about it! XD

Sincerely,
DCD10Unite