Excellent ending there! I especially liked the way that the pregnancy was announced. I can't wait to read the next story, so I will read that next.

HOLY WALL OF TEXT! Im so outa here.

This is really good!

Great read thanks for sharing.

I tried to read your story. however your lack of paragraphs and breaks in thoughts makes it too hard to read.

I feel that Neville's tale will be even more unpleasant than canon.

Harry yelling at Sirius actually makes more sense than immediately accepting him.

Shouldn't Luna speak to honor her mother?

This has some serious wall of text issues from what seems like bad line spacing, I recommend re-format it or go through and press enter a lot.

I really liked this story. It had obvious grammar and spelling issues, but I can deal. Good job!

A bad case of cancer? Lol. This typifies the entire story. I got to Chapter 5 and just couldn’t keep going. Having read some reviews I was a bit curious about Lily’s will. It didn’t disappoint...it was ridiculous. And why do you express shock at your own characters/writing in the aithor’s notes? If you wrote, you shouldn’t be surprised.

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I think it's the first time I actually hate Lily. Why are they all acting like she did something good ? She is a monster ! First she murdered her own husband and put her son in mortal peril by switching the secret keeper for someone she knew was a death eater. And what exactly did she meaned by "this course of action will save my son from the fate Voldemort placed upon him" ? Inviting Voldemort into her home was, in her opinion, going to save her son ? Geez she is lucky Snape begged for her life, she is lucky Voldemort actually accepted Snape's demand, she is lucky she annoyed Voldemort enough that he killed her which create a protection for her child and finally she is lucky Voldemort completly forgot about this protective magic in his haste of killing Harry ! Because if one of those numerous conditions had not happened, Harry would have die and it would have been entirely her fault.
So, what was her plan exactly ? How was it supposed to protect Harry ? Because she did not know about Snape begging for her life so she did not know Voldemort intended to spare her and that she could die for Harry creating a magical protection for him, so what was her plan ? How exactly having Voldemort killing her husband and her was going to protect Harry ? So apart of the called "mercy kill" of James, what was the plan to protect Harry ? Because it really look like Harry's survival was pure dumb luck.
Oh ! And let's not forget that her brilliant plan also put Sirius in prison for twelve years and made Harry an orphan abused by the Dursley because she decided it was better to die with her husband than to live for her son. Congratulation Lily you ruin everyone's life.

I have severals problems with your story.
First, are you for real ? Sending a man to prison without trial is, in your opinion, not a crime ? If you really think that, you have issues.
Second, I don't like how you treat magic like a deus ex machina to justify some random stuffs. The Goldew family's magic raised so many questions and did not solved any thing. Why was it not identify sooner ? Your OC did it in a matter of seconds, no one investigate why the Potter's will was not executed before ? And how does this magic works exactly ? So people can sealed anything they want ? Well that's convenient. And how do you break this kind of magic ? In your story Harry just said "unseal" in parseltongue and it worked. But you said that parseltongue wasn't a form of magic, just a langage so that's all it took to get rid of the seal ? Saying "unseal" ? Why no one has done it before ?
And then there is this curse James had, how is that even a curse ? He was almost invincible. Why did he decided to hide ? It's not like some death eater could kill him in a fight with this curse. And why not use this so called curse on everyone ? Seems pretty good stuff for a war. And James accusing Peter in his will is weird, after all he could have died because of someone else. For example if Sirius was the traitor he could have killed Peter to broke the fidelius and then go after James. So it does not make a lot of sense to jump to conclusion like that and immediatly blame Peter.

Love it!

LMAO this is trash. "Semi-immortal"? Some flimsy excuse to get around the "Outing Peter as traitor via will when there's no way they'd know he was a traitor when writing said will."

I mean, if Sirius decided to tell on James during a hogwarts prank to McGonagall, would he just explode due to the betrayal? I mean come on.