That fic really needs beta.

If you continue this, which I think you should as it's quite good, are the Pokemon only going to have four moves? I honestly have no patience for Pokemon stories like that but to each their own.

I hope those three try and poach Giovanni's Persian. That would solve the situation nicely.

New chapter. Nice.

I'd love to see you continue this. But even if it's just a one-shot, I still enjoyed it.

I agree, I do not like fanfictions where Ash get betrayed by his friends at all. I don't think they would actually do something like that, especially for crazy reasons, like being jealous of another character.

You gonna post more of this? Seems like this could be the start of a whole new story. It really does.

I've never enjoyed betrayal stories, but I'm liking this take on them.

I like your story better than the other betrayals

*sits back with a glass of soda and waits for the review show to start* I wonder what sorts of moronic arguments the Betrayal idjits are gonna try to "defend their honor". xDDD

This is totally a real review and definitely not from spacebattles pokemon fanfic ideas, rec and discussion thread. Rargh rargh rargh... my betrayal fics you tarnished their image, waa waa. How dare you, Satoshi (How dare you call him ash that's not his name) is meant to be a dark, brooding, silent cool dude.

Can't wait to see the angry rebuttles from the fans of betrayal fics.