This is really interesting so far! I'd like to read more of it if you ever get back to it. You write the chocobros well. Their interactions and dialogue are spot on! And the suspense is building nicely!

I'm liking where this is going. Keep up good job!
I like your storytelling style, flows with a nice pace.

This is an interesting story and on one hand I think I know what is going to happen but at the same time I'm sure you have some twist planned. I'm looking toward to the next chapter either way :)

Well this cliffhanger sounds like it's gonna go places! I love forboding feeling, good job.

I really hate Ardyn. What did he do to my precious sunshine? Oh! I can't wait for next chap. Thanks for continue it!

Ahhhh what has Ardyn got planned for them? What's he doing to Prompto and everyone else?! So glad you continued this, really like it!

Hello!
Found this fanfiction Today. And I totally love this Start. Please continue this soon !

Arghhhh! My poor Prompto! I really want to hug him before that bastard guy can torture him.
I'm looking for next chapter. Thanks for sharing.

Hey if this isn't a interresting start then i don't know what is. Hope you update soon! I'm hungry for more.

Can't believe I haven't reviewed this yet! Really excited for this one, wonder what Ardyn has done to them!

Please update it. The story is so good so far. And your way of making the story come to life is amazing. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Lol, it was supposed to say, "nothing but puppet. Burn, baby. Burn." Faaaaail! I hate this mobile app.

Ah, Ardyn! *heart* Can't help it, just he being in a story makes me smile this Cheshire Cat grin. Cool idea, and one that really falls riiight into my alley. I'll be looking forward to seeing this progress. 'Cause that 'using Prompto to tear them apart' is such a delicious idea, isn't it?! (I've dwelled on that myself, too.) And gotta say, and although it's part of the game dialogue, I'm so pleased to see that little nursery rhyme there! And hey Prom, here's one to you,
"You might laugh now/ but just come tomorrow/ you've no idea how/ it came to this sorrow./ Overflows now your bucketbut one day you'll learn./ You're nothing but , baby. Burn.

I like it! fyi you drop the "r" off of stranger a few times, so it's like "the strange blah blah blah"