Oh wow, this was quite sad. And there's going to be more chapters?! Oh boy, we're in for a ride!

From what I could see, everyone was in character, and the story was very well-written and contained little to no errors or typos. But, oh man, the emotion in this story! It cuts right to the point, and it definitely pulls at the heartstrings. I'm scared at the sadness that is yet to come, but I'm also excited to see what more you can add to this story and its idea.

Awesome job on this! I can't wait to read the next chapter! :)