There was no part of the conversation between percy and the athena spawn that involved the athena spawn hitting on percy.

Alright somethings NEED to be done before this becomes readable.

1) Make use of bolding when making A/N's in the middle of a story.

2) Capitalize all names (this helps alot)

3) Make use of the tab and enter keys (for make new paragraphs, this helps break up a Wall Of Text and helps the reader understand the story better)

4) Really, get a good beta or learn your grammar rules.

I think that this is a great story and I hope we will see the next chapter soon

It's a good start. There is room for better grammar and maybe sort the paragraphs a bit. But it's not so bad that it is unreadable. Good job, I hope we can see the next chapter soon!

Good story I don't care about Grammer but please Update

good job

Please improve your writing. Your grammar is all over the place, your punctuation isn't correct and your paragraphing isn't done well. I'm not trying to flame you or anything, just pointing out how your writing is now.