Nice to see another pairing
Didn't expect that

For me, I think it’s good but I think you should have gotten a beta. It’s quite choppy

This is one of the best stories I have read in a while! Great job, #future author

OMGS, THIS WAS SO GOOD! GREAT JOB, I LOVED IT! no seriously, this was an awesome story.

Great job!

Sorry but it doesn’t really feel natural for them both to just turn good like that.

Great story I was actually almost crying at the end many a little longer and I would be really crying. But one of the best fabrics I have read and I've read a lot. #FutureAuthor

tht was AWESOME it was touching to

Mormo? More like Mormon

Wow I loved this great job

This story is really good! Like, it's the only Chaos story that's actually caught my eye, but the dialogue does get a little boring. I'd suggest adding things like actions (He grins. "Some dialogue") or descriptions ("Some dialogue" she talks slowly, as if she's speaking to a seven year old.) (His eyes are as round as saucers. "Some dialogue.")

-Brisingr

HI. MY EYES HURT FROM SCROLLING SO MUCH BUT I FINALLY FOUND THIS STORY AGAIN AND I AM CONTENT WITH MY LIFE.

-Brisingr

he didn't come back from the bathroom 'cuz he was having sex there! :-)

You can't just ask someone to put a couple together, with people who are already dating other people, when it's nearing the end of the story

Pleaseee make this a percy/piper story, its a very engaging book and well written, my advise is to maintain the same level of vocabulary throughout. I really hope you end up finishing this because it will be well worth the wait.