I like it a lot! **

How interesting, Harry is Salazar... Well, we'll see where that brings us won't we? And from Tom's dreams I can tell we have the first step to a very healthy relationship (yeah I'm getting ironic there...) I wonder what will happen when Tom will try to make his dreams come true. I can't really picture your Harry being so helpless.

As for suggestions, I believe you've opened some doors with those two facts, and I suggest you explore what's behind them.

Your use of point of views was better (although in my personal tastes, I strongly believe there is not that much difference between using he or I when dealing with a character point of view, and thus prefer when you stick to one throughout your story. But at least now it makes sense). But I noticed typos and missing words in your chapters. Maybe you should wait a day before proofreading a new chapter to make it easier to spot your mistakes?

Anyway, thank you for the chapters and the story!

Hi! So I just started reading your story and as to this chapter, I've noticed some elements I thought I'd be better off pointing out, in case it hasn't been done before.

You seem to have a clear idea of who your characters are, what they think like and what they want. I dont know yet what your story will have to make it special but I'm sure there will be something, be it in your characterization or your plot. Already I loved the idea that students were never basically told real facts as to how important OWLS are. Although I believe hearing that it may decide what newt you'll be able to take and what job you mill get is quite motivating as well.

However, based on this chapter, I think you could easily better your writing style. I see two ways for now.
The first is to have a clear stand on what type of narration you are using. This is a problem extremely common on this website. Basically, you jump from I to he as if it was interchangeable. For instance, in the beginning with Hayden's point of view, you started using he then switched to I. It feels extremely strange as the identity of your narrator changed in the middle of your paragraph. The only way to switch like that as if your narrator is getting into the head of the character whose point of you you're telling. However, as they are still different entities (as you first used he to talk about Hayden) any narrative part must keep the he. Even for something as simple as he said or he thought.

The second point is that you should pay attention to what new information you're giving. Reading from Tom's point of view that Hayden is beautiful and has long untamed and shiny midnight tresses once ias great as it let's us see Tom's first impression of Hayden and gives us a little description of the man. However, once we got this description, there's no need to get it again. But these pieces of information were already given in th previous chapter. So it is redundant and made me afraid. Will all Tom talk about is how pretty he finds Hayden and how shiny his tresses are? I'm sure it won't but still, be careful to always provide something new in your text. And if there's something you wish to repeat, make sure the repetition brings something new to your reader, a new meaning to the information, a new importance to it. Like a leitmotiv. Or at the very least try to change the vocabulary so that it won't feel that we have read this particular sentence before.

All that being said, maybe I will find these two flaws were only present in this chapter as I continue reading...

Thank you for the story, I look forward to seeing where you intend to lead us.

Thank you for a very enjoyable chapter.

update please. I can't wait for new chapter.

ur back! I was so excited to see the update. and it was a awesome chapter. I like that harry is the basilisk master. about the ideas, maybe some troubles with Dumbledore trying to do something. Abraxas trying to have the professor's attention. More of Tom's jealousy.

Oh wow just nuts nice update

Good chapter and I can’t wait to see what happens next

Please update. This is really good. I know Tom will not stop until Harry has a bump (pregnancy) and even then, he will be even more possessive hehe

Hehe thinking when he casted the ?
you update soon!

Hehe
Please update! This is sooo good.
Maybe have a crush on Harry too

Can't wait for more chapters!

Reading again.. oh I can't wait for more! This story is so good!

Such a great story!

I think I'm favoriting all ur story's XD plz update when u can!