I loved this! Really nice job!

Awesome job! I felt the panic, the intense gravity of the situation more than in so many other stories. Sometimes Danny seems under- or overdramatic, but this was just right. It felt real!

Hohhhhhh I am in love with this parallel structure! I'm such a sucker for it after all. :3

This is beautiful, I love stories that focus on Danny's deeper thoughts after the accident. I love the dark approach with Danny and feeling dead. I felt my own heart stop when the alive, alive, alive stopped and he felt cold. Tears actually welled up in my eyes as he was panicking about Jazz finding her little brother dead the following morning. So moving with your beautiful writing! C:

This was great!

Well Danny just needs to hear his heart and remember that he indeed is alive, nicely done.

Invader Johnny Signing Off.

Oh my lord! This is amazing! Love it so much! I love your writing style!