Great ending :)

Great ending!

I've already read "Bring You Sunshine", so I've got high hopes for this story Mr Gamer.

Gotta say, I'm not disappointed at all. The inclusion of a strange other world that reacts and relates to Qrow and Raven's Semblances is VERY interesting. Damn, I can't wait to see where else this goes.

Jaune did Taiyang's daughter and ex wife. Talk about inserting dominance

I have no words for how much I adore this story. I thought it was simple fetish fuel at first, but this became one of the best stories I ever read. I love Ravens mativation, but also the assurence that in the end, Yang really doesn't need her, as right Raven may have thought she was. A powerful story with a powerful ending.

Ha! talk about akward situations. That was funny

Yang hadn't* thought - what is it with you and last chapters having the spelling mistakes? Not to mind this fic suffers less from the improper speech paragraph separation as the last one I reviewed did, but it's still there.

where *she* lives, - You missed bolding the letter 's'.

Can't say this fic was as good as the other one. This one kinda fell flat on its face even more in the romance aspect. The one that pretty much didn't exist.

What was pretty beautiful.

Great beginning.

This story and your writing was so great that it would be amazing to see a sequel to this. Perhaps a one-shot of the entire team getting back together. Maybe they see Blake and Jaune has helped Yang with forgiving her, considering he can no longer see his own partner, Pyrrha.

Its a good fic, nice plot, great drama and even tragic ending was appropriate, but there are few things that I found lacking:
1)Romance between Jaune and Yang is too rushed, too fast
2)Jaune feels like 3d rate character, he didn't do much, was more of a damsel in distress, kinda sad.

You’re an amazing writer! I hope we can see an epilogue to this.

traaaaaaaaaasssshh

Man, this is incredible! You are a fantastic writer and I hope you continue to upload your work for us to read. I'm very happy to have found a new author to read from.

I'm sad she had to die... but I get the impactful ending you were going for. It seems to end here, as I can not see any thing to continue from. So good job.