Please continue this its great

NEXT!

"Im gonna kill you because you found out" *Someone asks him that he only talked to him once* "Come to my house to find out."

Who cares if he gets the bite if someone else he can bite who can get it can become as strong as him

You to continue

More plz it's honestly AMAZING no lie, no sarcasm just pure unaltered badassery

The next chapter interests me. From experience i know that those two things don't go well together

Do you ever plan to update this story? I wish you would it's awesome!

I’m loving this story. Keep up the good work

When is chapter 22 coming

Good concept but the plot was pushed way too fast. It feel degrading for women with how fast the female characters have fallen for Naruto. I can get behind a confident Hinata so long as the progression was steady and she visibly worked hard to change. That was not shown here and there was no visible conclusion as to why she was so confident when her entire life her family put her down emotionally. For people in her situation she would either develop an overconfident personality or a shy personality. Both of which would have been fine if she worked to get past her insecurities.

Having an interest in the supernatural is fine for one person at a time but reality dictates Naruto wouldn't get that lucky a second time. Some well and true conflict makes a story interesting. So I recommend having either Hinata or Temari fearing Naruto for a while and slowly build something real through strife.

Kushina is something that could have been done much better than it was. She was obviously imprisoned for a long time so muscle atrophy probably set in years ago. Instead of having her become such a solid member of the story right off the bat you could have left her bedridden until she recovered and used that oppurtunity to draw out the length of her thoughts on loving Naruto more than a son. Ignoring the mental damage done to her during her time being physically tortured by Danzo.

Ahri is something I'm willing to overlook considering what was said about her heat season coming around. But it could have waited a while and while the plot progressed you could have injected a sense of sexual tension in their relationship.

The appearance of Yami is something that could have also been done much differently. Yami is a goddess, I can't imagine her going to the mortal plane period. It would have made much more sense coming to him in a dream.

Like I said earlier, this fic has a good concept but it's too transparent. I could predict the plot points of chapters if I got a but of an idea what that chapter entailed beforehand. You haven't foreshadowed much of anything since his little outburst at Kakashi after the wave mission.

You've been much too focused on Naruto's growing relationships and not focused enough on properly setting the foundation for the plot. Work on that and I could see this fic being something great down the line. Till next time.

please update and continue this story for a long time!

Nice concept, but ultimately poorly written. Everything feels a bit rushed. Has the same fatal problem canon has; poorly wirten characters that have completely unbelievable personalities. Incest is a sure fire way to ruin a story.

Everything just feels rushed and like a retelling from memory. “This happened that happened then love at first sight and...” that and theres zero character development.

Why incest?