Will you look at that, the second Revan wakes up, the author goes into a comatose state as deep as Revan’s.

Shame really, was really invested in this story :p.

Dude this story is cancelled is it? You left it at a good cliffhanger but it's high time it be continued. So Meetra and Anakin will be sitting on the sides for a while. When the Clone Wars happen, Revan will be instrumental. No one alive knows war better than him and Meetra.

Been a year. This hiatus almost up?

this is stupid why put revan in the story if he's asleep the whole damn time

I was somewhat taken aback by the way you sidelined Revan right from the off but I agree the story works better this way. Despite my desire to see a good Revan in the future story, it would have been incredibly difficult to have the Meetra-Anakin relationship develop as you have with Revan being aware.

But I do think you kept Revan asleep for far too long in the story. The reviewer talking about how jarring it is for readers to suddenly switch protagonists had a point in that you have to really be careful to make such a switch work. The thing is, you could easily have had him wake up and drift in and out of sleep for all of Meetra and Anakin's journey and essentially have him go through a much longer growth/re-learning period as he does in KoToR.

Meetra's interactions with the Council are pretty much perfect. As much as I respect Mace Windu and like him once he's grown as a character, OG Mace is an arrogant ass who would actually do perfectly in the KoToR-era Councils. And that's not a compliment.

I'm not too sure if I like that you had her fight with Maul end up in the reactor room. It seems the entire thing was a bit too convenient to put her in a position where she overestimates herself and has to feed on Maul like Nihilus in order to save her own life. I get it, you set it up with Anakin's dream(s) and it's a major plot point for the story but even at her weakest, I never saw Meetra organically fall into this hubris or start going down this road.

Here's the thing: Treya taught Nihilus to feed and he ultimately binged and couldn't get enough. Meetra was never taught how to use her Wound as a weapon and even in the end, everything she does with it is far more subconscious than deliberate. It's not going to turn me off the story but I think the Anakin visions pushed her struggle into the limelight too soon. It makes much more sense for the Maul feed to be the very first time it's highlighted in the story (aside from her missing the bonds with her friends). A slow decline into potential feeding madness makes more sense than the immediate loud warnings and major "oh my god, no!" feeling of melodrama that the story gave me.
BUT. Saying all that, once the Maul fight was over, I did enjoy seeing it from Anakin's perspective and how he reacted to not only her pain but his refusal to see her as anything but the good person she is.

And of course, you brought the Ebon Hawk in. There is nothing bad that can be said about bringing that beauty of a ship into a story!

Kreia is without a doubt one of the most unique and special characters in all of fiction. I love her lessons on the Force in KoTor 2 and I really enjoyed seeing Meetra's interpretation of them with Anakin. I also really appreciate how you're immediately showing what a difference the right (or wrong) teacher means to Anakin himself. While his Attack of the Clones/Clone Wars version is a moody, damaged and annoying git who is blind to his own issues (Canon-wise), it's also exactly how someone like Anakin would turn out considering how he was treated from Jinn onward by the Order.
Out of everyone in the entirety of SW lore, light-side Meetra and Revan are the only ones who I would trust to raise Anakin to become a "true" Jedi as well as being a good person. I think my only issue here is just how easily the Order and Council let Meetra take off with Anakin considering theirs about-turn at the end of Phantom Menace. And let's be truthful, that only happened because they were afraid of Anakin falling into the hands of the Sith so I imagine they aren't happy he's in Meetra's custody. However, I do accept that Jinn's death also helped to push through the turnaround and it's fine that Jinn not dying kept the Council from trying to grab the boy out of greed rather than any real desire to help him.

It brought back memories with Meetra getting quests once they hit Nar Shadda but I'm hoping that's more a nudge and wink type deal and not something you include throughout the story.
I wasn't too happy with the Hutt/Kitster scenes. I think Meetra's pull into being a new Nihilus is going to be one of the things about this story that I just won't like/agree with how quickly she's apparently able to go down that road. It feels like the Constantine film concept of once she's aware of what she is, she can't stop being influenced by it even though she was relatively fine before she knew the truth. But considering I see the concept used as a way of keeping Anakin from going dark, I'll try to put aside my issues with how heavy-handed the scenes are.

I'm not sure what I think of Meetra's attempts to talk with Anakin. While the conversation is pretty realistic in trying to explain the Force (and how light/dark doesn't mean good/evil), it felt like beating a dead horse when Anakin wasn't able to really grasp what was being talked about. I guess it's down to Meetra's history but there's no way she needed to go THAT deep into things during what amounts to Anakin's first week as a Padawan/youngling.

Chapter 10 is...a conflict for me. I really appreciate what you did with Jinn as I've never been a believer in him being the guy who could have kept Anakin on the straight and narrow. Jinn is far, far from a perfect Jedi no matter what metric is used to measure what that means and I like how you showed this and his willingness to realise his mistakes. On the flip side, pushing Obi-Wan into Palpatine's hands was painful to read.

Oh don't get me wrong, pre-CW Kenobi is definitely capable of doing so considering his history as a Padawan and how often he fell in love with a pretty face with a good cause. So it's not that I disagree with pre-trials Kenobi being suckered in by Palpatine, it's more that it's painful to see this happen to the guy who becomes CW-Kenobi.

Because yeah, Jinn was an utter bastard to Kenobi. From the insanity Obi-Wan had to go through to "prove" himself worthy of being Jinn's Padawan, to their fracturing mentorship when Kenobi left the Order and returned, to Jinn finding a shiny new kid to mentor at the drop of a hat and ready to "throw" Obi-Wan away (even if he might not have meant it that way) after how much he refused to take a Padawan before...Jinn's attitude was not the great Grey Jedi people see him as.
I really enjoyed Chapter 11 but I'd love for you (or anyone) to explain why Padme keeps getting written as a pacifist. While she might not have been a fan of the GAR originally, tried to get the Senate to do a political solution to the crisis and comes from a pacifist world, she wasn't against using force if and when it was needed. She brought together the people of Naboo to the droids and was knee-deep in the fighting on Geonosis. I'm seriously confused about this.

It comes across as a means of you forcing the confrontation about Malachor V. A rather ham-fisted way confrontation at that. First - Did you forget that the ENTIRE reason Meetra was an Exile is that she willingly went back to the Council and then vanished from civilisation because of how much she knew she crossed a line with Malachor? She doesn't need Padme shoving this in her face and even if Padme (for whatever reason) broke all rules of politics in verbally attacking Meetra out in public, Meetra herself would turn around and AGREE with her.

One of the most difficult parts of this story is how you keep pounding it into Meetra's head that she's an evil person for what she did/what she became and it's only Anakin who is bringing her out of her funk. You're ripping apart the entire character development/journey Meetra went on in KoToR 2 (including actually going to Malachor V and literally facing the very demons she'd been running from for years) all to write this character who I barely recognise.

I do get what you're trying here but you're overdoing it constantly. Padme, a woman who just shrugged when Anakin told her he slaughtered an entire village of Tusan Raiders because they killed Shmi, is going to lecture Meetra Surik that she's a monster by following the orders that ended a galaxy-spanning war? Padme, one of the key politicians in the entire galaxy just before the fall of the republic, is going to totally miss the obvious emotional pain Meetra is in when Malachor V is brought up?

Yeah, no. Even a 14-year-old Padme isn't going to do this. Not this aggressively.

And like I said before, the entire thing just comes across as another reason for Meetra's "I'm a monster" and for Anakin to be "no you're not and I'm going to save you" cycle of conversation.
This story has some really good organic growth with its characters and then you seem to lose focus and over-do some scenes to push/highlight the emotional conflict and its a real disservice to the story when that happens.

My conflict with this story comes from going from the Padme scene to the absolutely wonderful scene of Meetra coming to Mandalore and seeing how the people and its planet had been brought low over the thousands of years. You really let the reader feel the shock and sadness of what was to what is even when it was seen through the eyes of a former enemy.

Yet even in this great sequence, you totally destroy the scene with Padme. You have Satine specifically point out that the Jedi were involved in the Dral'Han and that it happened post-Russan Reformation. So my question is this - What right did Padme have to champion the New Mandalorians and the good of the Ruusan Reformation if her precious Republic and de-militarised Jedi did this to Mandalore? Now one atrocity doesn't overcome another but I find it telling that Padme is such a champion of the pacifist New Mandalorians who only came about because of the Dral'Han (something she would know) yet is unwilling to ignore the peace that came from Malachor V.
The thing is that it makes absolute sense for Satine to be the one who confronted Meetra over Malachor V and you did that scene perfectly, especially with Meetra's reaction and arguments in terms of how bad the Mandalorian Wars were before Revan took up his cause. Which just makes the Padme scene so painful and confusing to have happened.

And I swing back to absolutely loving parts of this story by your masterful confrontation between Jinn, Dooku and Damask. This is Damask before he started to lose his mind at the end of the Plagueis book and I really look forward to seeing this grand Chessmaster against the apprentice who really wasn't as smart as he thought he was.

And this then bounces into another great scene where you actually explain Anakin's possessive thoughts from the canon books that most people never think about. Padme's "my only true existence is being Anakin's wife" idiocy aside, Anakin's attitude towards Padme and his eventual fall makes total sense when seen through the eyes of a former slave and I'm glad you highlighted this. It's something that almost every story ignores.

I especially liked the part with Anakin's thoughts how he accepted that there was a difference between knowing of a problem and being able to fix it. Something people all too easily don't understand or don't care to.

And I also like Meetra's discussion on Revan. Revan is a genius but is also very dangerous. I won't say he has Antisocial Personality Disorder but he skirts the line in just how ruthless and cold he was during the wars. Revan has a switch in his head that means he can charge into the Star Forge and talk Bastila back to the light through the power of love only to then sacrifice thousands/millions for the Greater Good. He was and is the single most dangerous person in the entire Star Wars universe because of his combination of mentality and power.

I massively disagree that Anakin is twice the power of Revan but that's a debate that won't ever get answered.

I loved the Wounds of Malachor. Anakin's actions, Kreia's actions, even the Hanharr reference (Unique choice). It was a great way to "heal" Meetra and a brilliant step to really show the difference between this Anakin and the original. One looks to answers from elsewhere, the other willingly gives of himself.

Not entirely sure about the timing of Revan's waking up but it works with the story. I'm looking forward to seeing just how you interpret his character when this gets updated.

Scerra is strong even without the force. She would tear down the whole jedi order.

Anakin's alliance is with people while Padme's with ideals.

Sidious' manipulations are fascinating

I recently had thought about the question: What if Revan had returned during the Clone Wars? Naturally, I had to search to find out if anyone else had this idea. I was right in my suspicions. You coloured me intrigued with the summary, and I have fallen in love with this piece. I sure hope you update soon! I'm so invested in how Meetra/Anakin's relationship continues to grow, and how the Sith in their plots. You've done a wonderful job so far! I have noticed a fair amount of simple spelling mistakes and grammar issues, but the story is still well written!

Is is bad that I'm on team plagueis right now? I am much more intrigued by the direction he's taking the Grand Plan. Sidious is powerful yes, but too much of a traditionalist.

Quite honestly, I hated everything Old Republic that wasn’t KOTOR 1 and 2, which almost made me not read this story when the description seemed like it was going off the extra canon introduced in the comics and TOR. I am extremely glad I decided to read this after all though, seeing as you share my opinion on the extra canon, and seeing as how amazing this story is! The excellent characterization, the realistic butterfly effects, the engaging story, I could go on all day in every chapter and still not convey how good of a story this is. This feels like the actual continuation of how they deal with the issues and problems that Revan and Meetra had with themselves and each other, and seeing Meetra’s attempts to get past that to live her life is amazing! Hell, even if this destroys canon, it’s still a better canonical path for Revan and Meetra compared to what they actually got.
Anyways, thanks for the story, and I hope to see more someday!

I think I understand but will hace to play kotor2...

She is different from Darth Nihilus, Nihilus needed the force to stay alive, she only is torn from the force, she is still alive but not connected to the force in the traditional way. She like Nihilus are wounds but their nature is different, Nihilus needs the force to stay alive and needs it almost constantly, she is alive and doesn't need the force for anything but she is still able to use the force. Haven't played kotor2 yet but will soon.

This story is amazing! I NEED an update!

Such a masterfully told tale. You got me hooked. Please please continue.