Hmm. first, you are an excellent writer, and as someone who knows little to nothing about the fandom in question this has been an amazing introduction. I’ve really enjoyed it. That said the cast is swelling to the point where juggling them all is taking over the story. That’s not necessarily a bad thing, it’s just not something I enjoy reading. So I’m stopping here but despite that I really did want to let you know that I really appreciated your work.

Now this... this is INTERESTING

Amazing

Hi there, I just finished reading your story and wanted to tell you that I absolutely loved it! You had a great balance of keeping faithful to the main Danmachi plot without basically rehashing canon by adding in your own spin on things. Kodori is one of the best OCs I have read. I know that you're currently doing Kodori goes to another anime universe spin-off/sequel, but I think it would be really interesting if you ever wanted to do an AU with Kodori in another familia. Thanks for all your amazing work!

Wouldn’t really call it hentai

This story is barely different from canon. Also, why is she letting so many complete scumbags get away with shit? Seriously, the fact is you aren't trying to make a new story, you're just copying canon and self inserting yourself. I guess if Kodori is based on you I can see why this fanfic is shit, cause Kodori is a fucking dumbass who never makes rational decisions.

Second time reading this since all the Corona stuff.

I still love it as much as the first time i read it

Legendary

Thank you

Weapons used to attack will break upon impact... It gave me an idea of destroying enemies' weapons with the curse, forcing them to do hand-to-hand combat.

Asfi is level 4. Kodori is level 4. But their stats are far different. Kodori's stats would all be higher since it's rare for an adventurers stats to reach S-rank in a level. And nearly every one of Kodori's stats reaches that rank each level up, even breaking the barrier into SSS in some. So her endurance should be much higher than Asfi's strength. So her hug shouldn't have bothered her.

Then there's the ridiculous notion that Welfs strength is even close to Kodori's with 'his years of blacksmithing' and Haruhime's buff. It just doesn't work like that.

Then there's her losing a spar against a level 2. Even while distracted that doesn't make sense. Her training times at the Hostess with Luniore and Ryuu show that. Skill does make a difference, but the raw stat advantage is just too large for skill to overcome.

Then there's the trip down to the 18th floor to deliver the food and stuff. Kodori at her level and stats should be able to faceroll most of the mobs along the way and not even be scratched. Her speed is just far too high for the mobs to touch her. Her strength would literally explode them with a hit. Her endurance would shrug off even a minotaur's hit at this point. The author has Kodori growing so strong so fast, but doesn't recognise it for some reason. At this point her stats would be about on par with Ryuu and Luniore due to her stat accumulation per level.

She's killed people before though. She didn't freak out before. That room full of amazing. Blood everywhere. Bodies scattered. And even if by some bullshit act of author and no one in that room died she still shouldn't react like this. Death is part of the adventurer life, with his 'logical genius mind'(by this point I'm calling bullshit on both tbh) he should easily be able to rationalise it.

I wish you'd use other people's POV. Mikoto's would have been great this chapter. But apparently, you don't like to write what Kodori does during her rampages. Disappointing really.

The fuck was that shit? She flies around in the air coordinating then crash lands, somehow gets knocked out then spends the rest of the battle unconscious till she suddenly gets up and takes another hit. Her contribution during the battle was pathetic. Her strategy was good, but we all know it wasn't ACTUALLY her strategy. In canon, it's exactly the same.

Her presence is pointless in this story so far. She seems to be only in the story to suck Bell's dick about how heroic or 'good' he is. Every piece of praise she gets it's always 'But Bell is better, he's the REAL hero', or 'I'm always struggling to keep up with Bell, he's the amazing one!'. We haven't actually seen her struggling to keep up with him. At all. Considering her magic stat was actually above 900 before the training week for this war game i'd say she's beating him.

Not that we get to actually see the result of the training she did since the fucking author decided her best role would be unconscious. Again. It's kind of becoming a thing with her huh?

Why the fuck did she strip? What was even the point? I honestly thought her rage mode would be impressive. All it seems to be is a fear aura and pain suppression. Her reaction to her he's and asfi being there and obviously engineering the event is way too mild too. She's supposed to be a genius so it wouldn't be too hard to figure out the one's responsible.

Also there was no mention of either god releasing their power to trigger the dungeon. Makes no sense.