Thank GOD for Matt and this fic cause honestly Keith needs all the good friends he can get

Damn. This was so good. Oh hit me in all the right feels! Thanks for writing this.

Thank you for writing this! I'm only on the first chapter and already it's incredible! And that last line!

Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful! I love this so much! You're such a talented writer! Holy wow!

Consider this one favourited!

Thank you for writing!

AAAAHHHHH! EVERYTHING IS SNOWBALLING AND IT'S WONDERFUL! How will they get out of this?!

You really know how to build tension - by George, do you ever! *Applause*

I just love these flashbacks. They're so bittersweet and touching.

Here we go again! Wonderful as always, full of angst and confusion and questions! I love how Matt and Keith are so close.

I'm going to keep reading. :)

This was the best : ) Matt as a main character: ) and well written too : ) I’d like to see a sequel where Shiro meets his clone : ) fantastic story overall: )

the story feels incomplete. There are still so many things left unanswered. How will Shiro react Ryou? How with Shiro react to the use of his dead twin's name? Who will pilot Black now? Will Keith end up back with Red, back with the Blade or just hanging around the castle? Will Ryou be hanging around the castle or joining the rebel forces? How will the meeting with Lotor go?
I hope you plan a sequel.

I don't really care for time-skip between the previous chapter and this one. I wish we got to see Ryou's reaction to coming out of the pod, and his initial interactions with the other characters.

I think the scene with Pidge coming out of the pod could have been in the present, not a flashback. It throws off the pattern you've developed of having flashbacks from Matt, Keith, and Shiro's time on Earth.

Who did Pidge throw herself onto? The clone? It gets a bit confusing when you don't call him anything.

"who only knows what" sounds like a combination of "God only knows" and "who knows what".

Why did you put Lance and Coran out of the picture, then have the Blue Lion call to Lance for help? Why was it the Blue Lion instead of the Red one?

I'm glad that this ended with them finding Shiro, but I'm not sure what to think about the Keith/Shiro ending. I could buy the undertones of something stronger than friendship hinted throughout the story, but ... wouldn't Ryou make it kind of awkward? Like, if he and Shiro have the same personality and most of the same memories, would he also have feelings for Keith, and be hurt/jealous about Keith choosing Shiro over him? Particularly with that in mind, it seems a little odd for the story to end with Shiro being found but not finding out about his clone. How would he react to meeting him and working with him?

I like the last line, because it comes back to the story's premise about Keith and Shiro as Matt remembers them. I also find it interesting that you call them "the Garrison three," because I've heard Lance, Hunk, and Pidge called "the Garrison trio," so it's almost like they're counterparts.

Considering who features most prominently in this story and which characters end up together, I think it would be better to have the character labels be Keith, Matt, and Shiro, with Keith and Shiro as a pairing. Pidge and Allura only appear as much as Hunk, not very much at all.

Overall, this is a pretty good novella (as I call stories of this length).

I'm kind of surprised that it's taking so long for them to find Shiro's attack on Pidge in the security footage, but I'm guessing you need it to play out this speed for plot purposes.

In this and the previous chapter, maybe mention how many mice are accompanying Hunk, and where they are. I didn't know how many to picture, or where to picture them.

JSYK the flashback in this chapter broke the pattern of italics for flashbacks.

Nice ending!

Ah, now we're getting some answers! I'm glad that Shiro (or who/whatever he is) isn't consciously or deliberately doing wrong.

Having read this chapter, I definitely think it should be combined with the previous one.

There is one sentence in this chapter that I think is missing some words: "We're going deliveries aren't critical".

You might want to specify who "they" is in the opening paragraph.

The absence of the word "he" makes it sound like Matt's eyebrows let Allura continue.

Interesting having Matt eavesdrop on someone else eavesdropping, that's different. I wonder if the flashback could have been orchestrated differently, like if it were told from Keith's perspective. Matt doesn't actually need to have been involved; it might have been enough if Keith overheard the conversation, and then Shiro found out from him or from an officer that he was leaving. While I'm not sure I buy the whole situation with Keith wanting to leave so as not to steal Shiro's opportunities (their age gap would have protected them for quite some time), I like Shiro's quip about nerdy ice-gatherers.

Overall, this chapter seems too short compared to the previous two, not just in length but in the type of content. This chapter adds nothing to the plot, it just shows one more reason for Matt's well-established theory regarding Shiro. You could have moved the last scene of the previous chapter to this one, or moved this chapter's content to the next. Having just one line at the end for Hunk doesn't really add much.

I'm just catching up on all the updates since this story began. It's well written, plays out realistically, and now has nice twists and suspense. You mention Keith paling twice very close together, and use some variation on the word "potential" twice in two consecutive sentences near the end. I'm not sure how in-character Allura's kiss is, but I loved Keith's last line!