I love AUs that have some original thought. This takes the prize! I wondered why you were taking us back and forth at the first, but you certainly got my interest by introducing Hermione quickly and her rescue, now their kidnapping! Fast paced, interesting characters, and very involved premise. Can't wait for the next chapter.

I really like how you have this story structured for Harry and how he and Hermione meet at an early age and how they are EXTREMELY smart, can't wait to see how you rescue them both and how this kidnapping changes how Harry lives. Keep up the great work and keep evolving your writing style!

I like what you have written so far, looking forward to reading more!

Wow. Update soon.

Great chapter! This story is excellent. I can't wait for the next chapter. Please continue the excellent work

You have some good ideas for your story. Your pursuit of a beta is a very good idea. For suggestions on why and how, I have some short essays on my bio page.
There are quite a few oopses (e.g. the Malfoy manor is listed first in Yorkshire, then in Wiltshire; the Grangers being the only dentists in Surrey is ridiculous, as it's a very populous suburban county, over 1 million, south of London - perhaps they could be the only ones in Little Whinging).
The two biggest composition errors, because they are so confusing and almost always unnecessary, are abrupt change of tense, and abrupt change of person. Your story narration, like most fictional stories, is set in the past tense. This is quite normal. But suddenly, in this chapter, you switch the narration to the present tense. Just as confusing, your narrator switches suddenly from 3rd person to first person - with no announcement of that fact, no indication of who the new narrator is, and no particular reason for the change of person narration. I can guess who; but I find the shift to be unneeded, unwise and careless. It's confusing enough that you keep shifting the dateline from 1982 to 1989 and back; to abruptly shift tense and person as well is just too much.
I urge you to get a beta who is not only capable at language and editing, but also highly familiar with the Potterverse. Your story has much promise, and it would be good to see a beta polish it properly.
Keep it up!

The fuck is Yaxley going to do to Hermione?

Great chapter

Great chapter

Great meeting between Harry and Hermione. Thanks for sharing!

Interesting first chapter but rather horrid with how poorly Harry is treated. Thanks for sharing!

Great chapter! This is absolutely amazing! I'm glad it's H/Hr. I love H/Hr. Thanks so much for sharing your writing. Please continue :)

This was a great start!

This is very good so far, try not to leave it 1 and a half years for the next update ;). Also maybe add Super Harry in the description for the story he seems super intelligent so u can’t see how he won’t be super. I really liked Harry and Hermione interaction hopefully she can bring about some changes that get Harry out of the situation he is in. Keep up the good work as I sai don’t keep us waiting for an update lol

I feel that this will be an interesting story