Omfg, this is so funny

Hey mate, I really love this story and genuinely want to see it finished. I think you’re a brilliant writer and should endeavour to complete what you’ve started. I hope all went well for you and you received the scholarship you were working toward. I’ll send you a similar message should you not read this. Either way I occasionally use discord and if it would aid you in finishing this story I’ll happily join. Anyway mate keep up the brilliant work. This is a great story. (Also I’m having to post his review for chapter ten as I must have reviewed chapter eleven when I first read this some time ago)

Hi, im interested in your idea

Im in love with this story, please keep writing it.

Really nice story! At least she is not dying. I was a concern about this as Shikamaru was. Hope to read more of it!

This is great, and I hope you continue it!

Mate, once again this is amazing, but I must say I’m disappointed that is unfinished. I’d write more here but I must go. Anyway it’s amazing and I can’t wait to read the rest.

I just found this story and had to read it all at once. Love it and can't wait to read more!

This is so good! Ahh! I can't wait for the update!

Have your time ans be careful!

I love this story! please continue writing it

From the last chapter, i thought that you're just going to end that scene there and we'll move on to their last day of being together. I was fine with it. But then you posted this chapter, and boy was i wrong.
And i love how they're comfortable with each other and i love shikamaru throwing innuendos at temari. (so confident shika)
And lol for the dork couple doing the most cliche shoujo manga/anime to do, go to an amusement park, err but, in this case an andrenaline park. Also, all this lovey-dovey atmosphere make me think were a heading for a s# *t storm next chap.
And really, shika doing the do in the public? For your 2nd time? I didn't know you were this daring. He's you're problem now tem, you've unleashed the exhibitionist inside of him. Lolz.
And don't worry, it's really good for a lime. It's not cringey at all. I guess you could say it felt natural? Cause you know, they're young and has some pent up homornal and sexual urges and just recently engaged in their sexual life and they're attracted/in-love with each other...*sigh* They grow up so fast. (lol)
But seriously, I really enjoyed reading how you would write this part of their relationship; and i'm glad that at least you've dared to venture that far. Good job!
I'm both excited and sad, cause next chapter will be their last day together but next chapter there will be a possibility of yoshino and shikaku and maybe some sand sibling moment. Idk. I'm torn.

Okay no this was great. Nothing cringey about any of this. Nice job! Don’t worry, I would tell you if it was bad okay.

i really like your story . please continue writing this bcs you sure are good at this

Ok, I really like your story and have been reading it all along without commenting. You are doing pretty good job , the soft lemon is also good, just continue writing whatever you feel like , you are good at this.