Hello Author person. I LOVE your writing and this story

I have a love hate relationship with this story. I love the story itself, it’s great and I love the twist threw in, really the only thing I hate about it is that it hasn’t been updated in so long and I really want to read more

It sucks how infrequent updates are, I feel like it’s gonna mess with the momentum of the story so I’ll probably let months go by before I come back.

You’re a great writer though!

Please let Jake and the wolves show back up soon. Is what she is connected to the wolves somehow, if so wouldn't they have a legend about her. If not then my only other guess is psychic vampire

Why is Bella such an idiot? Feeding energy she knows nothing about to something else she knows nothing about. Honestly, why does all her reckless actions always work out? Would have been far more interesting if she killed him with that.

I'm so fucking mad that I got hooked into ANOTHER unfinished story. fuck why does nobody do twifics this good anymore

Really, weak to water. Thats really funny considering she consist of about 55% water.

Just found this story yesterday and couldn't stop reading even at work lol it's great and I look forward to more.

Yay! Looking forward to it

Okay, I haven’t gotten far into reading, but BLACKMILL ON MY MP3 PLAYER OH MY GOSH. How time really does fly by ;v;

Sorry to hear about your back! I hope it will get better soon. And, don't worry about the mate promoters. After all, it's your story and I think it will turn out best in the end if you stick to what you think is best. :)

I hope you get better soon

Ok! Quick thing because you mentioned back problems! I work in NYC as a programmer and have back issues here and there but there's 2 things that can help drastically. One option is pretty cheap, get a big exercise ball and sit on it when at your desk. It strengthens core muscles and releases some pressure on your back because it forces you into a more upright posture. we have a few in my office and they are awesome.

See is a standing desk. I know you might not of thought of that but they really do help with back pain. they are a bit more expensive but a good investment if you seen allot of time in front of the computer.

3rd, thanks for going to non-mate route. Had a date recently that I thought I couldn't mess up, but very much did. Nothing is easy in life, especially relationships and I think that was a big draw of twilight at the start was the simplest way you just find your soulmate with no work. It's an attractive prospect but not something that is healthy to believe in etc.

look forwards to the new chapter!

Not even a single kiss. Jeeze

I feel like there's promise here. You obviously have the ability to write a coherent story, however it's very bulky. I skipped entire paragraphs and still managed to follow the story.
Sometimes things just got a little too congested so I would suggest trying breaking it up a little more.

Also, so far the dialogue is pretty unrealistic. People don't suddenly yell profanities when an authority figure has the potential to hear them, let alone blow in a library.

On that note, very few principals (or generally people with power) would talk to Bella the way this one did. There's a difference between being understanding and basically letting someone go scot free.

I'm concerned you're going to make Bella a Mary Sue who's super powerful and can do no wrong. In reality, whatever is happening to Bella isn't going to be super noticeable later on when she moves (probably) but if you make her out as something special that EVERYONE knows about, that's such a waste of story.

Anyway, keep going.