Drawing some interesting connections between the piranha plant to pikmin and pokemon and... Carcosa? Surprised Bowser would care about a lone piranha plant, but then he is a big softie sometimes. Or maybe he doesn't like others using his world's assets without permission, the principal of the thing.

I thought I'd hallucinated the name Randolph Carter a couple chapters ago. And now the King In Yellow. I hope someone's stupid enough to read it.

This all meshed together pretty well.

Great job with the Pokemon. Both Greninja and Incineroar had personalities beyond "cute animals that repeat their names out loud a bunch." Great job with the nonverbal communication, using both body language and stated intention (Incineroar rushed over before things could escalate without him. Ha!). Who knew Lucario was such a chatterbox?

Enjoyed Viridi's characterization as well, and I'm digging this villainous subplot thing developing.

Understated humor runs through these chapter, helping this story to stand out from the vast bulk of Smash Fanfic.

The two-on-two match was executed with skill, managing to list off a lot happening, a lot of positioning, without ever being confusing or dry.

As for concrit, a little more character feeling/reaction/other interior stuff during the fight scene would've been nice. I mean like, what's a character thinking as the action unfolds, what considerations do they have as the situation evolves, or what are their hopes and fears about what might happen next? Stuff like that. I know I harp of this a lot. It's my personal philosophy that prose should show the inner life of characters that visual media can only indirectly reveal, but again, that just like... my opinion, man.

The fight scene was great anyways.

This was a chapter that I was definitely excited to see - I liked how you handled the Fitness Bread as both an inedible object and a weapon! I also liked Banjo's reasons for staying out of the action and returning to it. His dynamic with Kazooie is also great! Nice work on this!

Definitely an improvement over the early chapters.

Ryu tends to come off as more an elemental of martial spirit rather than a human being, and you did a great job of humanizing Ryu and making him interesting without losing his core focus.

I'm with Reflet, I wanna see the Ryu's half-dragon babies doing the shoryuken.

Ken and Ryu's relationship was fun to read. Character interactions, seeing how they feel or care about one another, is a big part of what fan fic is about for me. So this is my fav chapter of New Faces thus far.

"There was no Shoryuken without Ryu or Ken." Damn.

For concrit, the fight scene at the end came off as phoned-in for me. Like you weren't really feeling it, but knew you had to put something down. Lack of detail and emotion makes the scene feel perfunctory.

First and foremost, I want to say congratulations on publishing! This story has been around for two years now, and real happy to see that its still chugging along. Now its banjo and kazooie's turn. Easily a high-quality chapter. Starting it off with the dankest of mario memes was a great choice. Seeing them with the princesses was nice, and ganondorf and mega man are a unique supporting cast.

Banjo and kazooie are a great addition to the cast. Really wanted them to just hang out with everyone forever. Eventually, koozie is gonna have to answers ganondorf's challenge for new insults (ganongoloid). And really interested to see how soul edge plays into this. Damn fine chapter bruh.

Banjo and Kazooie were PERFECT! Like, %100 in character, and the chapter was even better as a result. Do not worry about "goofy" with those two ever again. If I didn't have my own plans for Daisy's arranged marriage, I'd yoink Daisy x Fredrick arranged marriage for myself.

The only thing that leapt out at me was that Mewtwo called Toadsworth an idiot and Peach didn't react. Like at all. And no, I wasn't expecting her to take a swing at her friend over it, but like, not even a sideways glance? Seems OOC.

Anyway, good work. WHEN TERRY!

Plot!

Isabelle just comes in and gets right to work. On point.

Favorite parts were her convos with V and Falco, who was a sassy birb as one expects. Always nice to see villains plotting as well, with F-Zero bad guys no less! I approve. I find Dark Samus' scheme a bit more interesting than Dharkon.

Kinda disappointed there wasn't more to getting Rool out of jail. Would've been interesting to see Isabelle handle that negotiation.

If I have a real complaint, it's that Master Hand's ominous news didn't seem to have much impact on her. I know Isabelle is skilled at using work to avoid worry, and she's wise to focus on what she can control only, but still, that's a worrying possibility. In the chapters I've tried out, there is this sense that everything's super casual, super laid back even as weird people meet other weird people in this weird place. Many of them are used to it by now, after 4 tournaments, but the newcomers take everything in stride quickly, and that feels off to me.

Sorry, rambling. Remember, this is just one reader's biased opinion. These chapters show a lot of improvement over the earlier ones.

Favorite part for me was Richter and Peach bonding over the common trauma of being possessed and used as a tool by a malevolent power. I never would've make that obvious connection between them, and one of the chief pleasures of big crossovers like this it's finding connections between characters.

I also like that you've put some thought into what Smashers each newcomer would likely get along with, and how they might react negatively to others. Simon and Richter's meetup was suitably awkward.

As for criticisms, I confess I'm struggling to separate "How I would write this" versus "How can Falco Player improve what they're doing." More mood or atmosphere for the setting would be nice, and despite the example set by fantasy writers, you don't need to carry on with setting details for multiple paragraphs, or describe the bark texture on every tree branch. Just a single sentence or minor detail every now and then can help. Don't forget showing how environment affects the POV character, when appropriate.

Nice introduction to the Inkling! I personally enjoyed how you described her emotions when she was invited to stay in the Smash Mansion. If I could offer some critique, maybe you can hopefully introduce how the Inklings in general can communicate and speak perfect English, but that's just me. Overall, great start for a first chapter!

I haven't played Splatoon yet, so I appreciate getting caught up to speed here.

A lot of characterization can be accomplished by showing how a character views the world around them. What details do they notice, and which do they ignore? What do they value and prioritize?

Ace is a pro-level competitor and that shows in this chapter, what with her constantly sizing up all she meets and profiling them. She felt some anxiety about making bad first impressions, but wasn't shook at all, so she has a lot of confidence and is comfortable in her own rubbery skin.

Liked the part at the end when she began to reminisce about her early days starting out in Inksports, even as she starts fresh in a new competition.

I would've liked to seen more exploration her feelings about meeting extinct races and also encountering races she could never have imagined. But this is a first chapter with a lot of setting to establish while keeping things moving, so I can see where you might not have wanted to focus on that aspect.

tbh it feels like rosalina should be the 2nd in command because she not only shares a similar mentality but also owns alot of insight and understated yet noticeably powerful magical abilities to her name. then again she's alot less aggressive than mewtwo so maybe she'd be less willing to go by peaches slightly mafia inspired ways of maintaining order.

I feel like the dialogue tags are just a writing practice issue which can be cleared up pretty easy when you're writing otherwise pretty fine. There a things that a character can do to make themselves and the world and more animated when they talk as opposed to just giving a line like a script.

Like it's not everywhere, so its noticeable to me on your one liners, because some parts read like you know where you're going, and the one liners just feel like you're asking around the room of your characters to get them screen time and advance the story/get the character's character in.

And to your credit, juggling so many characters can be a common pitfall in Smash Fic. I think you do it pretty well, tho. It may/may not have been a better idea to release the individual Heroes in different chapters just to alleviate yourself of some of that, but its fine.

Dude, the Lord of Dragonians basically being N to a bunch of Dragon Pokemon is the best idea ever. The Reality Bleed seems like it could lead to some very fun interactions between characters. I'm looking forward to WHEN TERRY shows up.

WOW AMAZING JOB For this Chapter from This Story though, I AM LOVING IT!

Joker's friendship with Corrin is super wholesome, I dig it quite a bit. Also Smashopolis seems like an interesting place and I can't wait to explore that more!