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   salwachama05 chapter 1 . 5/6 Please update, wait impatiently |
| mjscev chapter 1 . 9/3/2019 nice! looking forward for the continuation |
| silvery crimson moon chapter 1 . 9/19/2018 I love the storyline already! |
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/2/2018 Might need to separate your writing some, when someone new is speaking start a new paragraph and reread before posting. Other than that you have a really good idea and if you're dedicated to it, it'll be a great story. Good luck! :) |
| Shadow.nao chapter 1 . 6/30/2018 Awesome fic! Please update! |
| kyekye chapter 1 . 5/16/2018 ok, first space out the dialect please it's really confusing to read all put together like that also let us know who is speaking during those times this is just some stuff I learned my self I had to read it over multiple times to understand it. it is really good otherwise I like the idea |
| xxSnowxxAngelxx chapter 1 . 4/23/2018 Interesting idea so far... but could do with a couple tweaks, mainly separating the speech so that every new person talking is a new paragraph/line. I like it though |
| 00-SilentObserver-13 chapter 1 . 4/6/2018 Very promising and has lots of potential can't wait to read/see where this goes/how it develops |
| tasarlaluminitsa chapter 1 . 3/31/2018 Sounds promising I hope to read more in the future :) |
| Neko chapter 1 . 3/22/2018 Really nice idea, though there are some gramma and spelling mistakes. Maybe it would be good if you get someone to proofread your chapters. Apart from this I really liked it! |
| AngelaVargas1 chapter 1 . 3/22/2018 It's good, but there are couple of Typos or Grammar mistakes, but it's still readable. though you have to fix it... I'm looking forward on reading more of your story. |
