How's Alberta weird? She just seems like a feminist to me. Nothing wrong with that.

Hmm interesting start.

I love this story so much it hurts. So excited for the next chapter! Beautiful stuff! 3

i’m really lost on why she’s thjs angry and where this all came from and why she’s taking it out on peter. especially if her mental age should be in 20s-30s like how are you gonna be acting this way.

oh! well okay!

things are definitely getting interesting

oh no it’s about to get real. i’m sensing a lot of conflict. I CANT WAIT

i cackled when she said “im the queen of that country”

i think for chapter you might wanna put page breaks for when you go to a new scene or such bc it’s hard to understand if you’re continuing a current scene or youve moved on to a new one. just a recommendation

i do like the story and i can’t wait to explore more of Beatrice backstory as well as her relationship with peter

the story is very interesting although the writing does leave me confused in some places...

So I read all of it
It's for sure an interesting concept and I like that you change things to fit the story. Beatrice is such a strong character that she almost held all of my attention.
The marriage thing though...I just couldn't suspend my disbelief enough for that. If you did think about rewriting again, I would suggest changing that. And at the start arranged marriages - while they did happen - it's not like the 18th century where they barely see each other.
I dunno. Still, I enjoyed most of it.

love it!

Oho! William is here. I have been waiting for this I even couldn't stop myself from imaging different scenarios when and where Beatrice will finally meet her son. Heck I even thought she might never get to meet him and what a painful thought that was. Man, thirty years.

You are very original. There is lots to read. Like the chapter before Peter's dream. I specially like reading that part. It was realistic that happens and I can definitely see that being peter and Beatrice's life years later ( where peter never went to Narnia).

As for the next chapter I'm honesty unable to image it. As in its going to be tough. Emotional.
I dare not think about the siblings reaction.
I mean Susan could lose her top.
But peter? And when the fact that Beatrice lied about the pregnancy is also known.
He suspects there is a former lover and she now has a child who by the is way older than her ( that would mess with their minds. Susan. Susan. )

Honestly I'm anticipating it all. But I will wait patiently.
This was another good chapter. Thanks for sharing. :)

Love it!